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Choose oneof the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives. a)automobilesb)bicyclesc)airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Choose oneof the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives. a)automobilesb)bicyclesc)airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
It is considered by some sections of society, the new trend is adopted by a certain number of individuals namely outfits, haircuts and many more. There are so many factors that encourage the people to follow it, which is a boon for them. Celebrities are one of the major reasons which encourage the human for fashion, as from TV and other technical gadgets, one can get information about new clothes as well as hairstyles, which is used by their role models. Due to this, common one's also want to try it to become limelight among their kith and kin. Advertisement is another contributing cause of this development. Almost everyone's use election device like as computer, mobile phone and so on. Thus, companies give ads of latest design related products on social sites because the masses can easily purchase it from online sites, so it is an easy way to encourage the dwellers. Having followed this trend is quite beneficial for both industries as best as mankind, as it is helpful to develop the business of a particular company, because if individuals will purchase latest items to show their status, then companies can get more profit from them also they can produce more products. Not only industries also it is a best way to boost the confidence level between people. In dint of it is scientifically proven the people who get praise from another one, they are well confident as compared to other individuals. Apart from this, it has given so many employments to workers are most like the models who can show the items front of the public also labourers for making products. To conclude, there is no denying that to follow the new trend is a better idea to get the Name and fame also become trendy person, but it must use according to their budget.
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is considered
by
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some
sections of society, the new trend
is adopted
by a certain number of individuals
namely
outfits, haircuts and
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many
more. There are
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so
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many
factors that encourage the
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people
to follow it, which is a boon for them.

Celebrities are one of the major reasons which encourage the human for fashion, as from TV and other technical gadgets, one can
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get
information about new clothes
as well
as hairstyles, which is
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used
by their role models. Due to this, common one's
also
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want
to try it to become limelight among their kith and kin. Advertisement is another contributing cause of this development. Almost everyone's
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use
election device like as computer, mobile phone and
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so
on.
Thus
,
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companies
give ads of
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latest
design related products on social sites
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because
the masses can
easily
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purchase
it from online sites,
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so
it is an easy way to encourage the dwellers.

Having followed this trend is quite beneficial for both industries as
Did you mean "good"?
best
as mankind, as it is helpful to develop the business of a particular
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company
,
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because
if individuals will
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purchase
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latest
items to
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show
their status, then
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companies
can
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get
more profit from them
also
they can produce more products. Not
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only
industries
also
it is
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a
best way to boost the confidence level between
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people
. In dint of it is
scientifically
proven the
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people
who
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get
praise from another one, they are well confident as compared to other individuals. Apart from this, it has
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given
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so
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many
employments to workers are most like the models who can
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show
the items front of the public
also
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labourers
for making products.

To conclude
, there is no denying that to follow the new trend is a better
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idea
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the Name and fame
also
become trendy person,
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but
it
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must
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use
according to their budget.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Choose oneof the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives. a)automobilesb)bicyclesc)airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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