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The pie chart shows the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.1

The pie chart shows the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.
It is believed by some that watching game is a waste of free time. I completely disagree with this statement, I believe that sport would teach one or two lessons that could be directly implied in our daily life. The most compelling reason is because it is good for our memories. One club of soccer team has minimal of twelve members, one game is joined by two soccer teams. This for sure is one of the activities that our brain will gain advantage on in the future. Another reason, to have an athletic idol, will increase our motivation to be as active as them. Because, being active is beneficial for our well-being by increasing our happy hormones. For instance, my nephew is eager to learn Tennis as a result from watching his Idol’s tournament last night. Finally, sport in general has a few valuable lessons for ourselves and the next generations to come. Such as, being disciplined, to never give up and keep on fighting. Hence, this activity could serve as a fruitful family gathering. It is way better than gossiping around about our neighbours, colleagues, or even our own introvert cousins who always skip Thanksgiving dinner. In conclusion, I totally disagree with watching games is considered as misuse of relaxation period. In fact, it could give us useful takeaway such as, training our brain, motivation to be active, and it brings us closer together as a family. Given this situation, government should invest more in their youth to become more active in sport.
It
is believed
by
some
that watching game is a waste of free time. I completely disagree with this statement, I believe that sport would teach one or two lessons that could be
directly
implied in our daily life.

The most compelling reason is
because
it is
good
for our memories. One club of soccer team has minimal of twelve members, one game is
joined
by two soccer teams. This for sure is one of the activities that our brain will gain advantage on in the future.

Another reason, to have an athletic idol, will increase our motivation to be as
active
as them.
Because
, being
active
is beneficial for our well-being by increasing our happy hormones.
For instance
, my nephew is eager to learn Tennis
as a result
from watching his Idol’s tournament last night.

Finally
, sport
in general
has a few valuable lessons for ourselves and the
next
generations to
come
. Such as,
being disciplined
, to never give up and
keep
on fighting.
Hence
, this activity could serve as a fruitful family gathering. It is way better than gossiping around about our
neighbours
, colleagues, or even our
own
introvert cousins who always skip Thanksgiving dinner.

In conclusion
, I
totally
disagree with watching games
is considered
as misuse of relaxation period. In fact, it could give us useful takeaway such as, training our brain, motivation to be
active
, and it brings us closer together as a family.
Given
this situation,
government
should invest more in their youth to become more
active
in sport.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The pie chart shows the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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