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The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007 Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate Write at least 150 words v.1

The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007
It has been argued that it will bring such a good public health improvement, if people have more sports facilities, while nowadays some other people believe that other factors are of prime importance in these issues. I lean a little bit toward the second group belief, this essay will discuss about the effect of making facilities more reachable, and on the other hand how important role Educations can play. From one perspective, it would be a good way to encourage people to do sports more or just start it. In the modern world, people have many different life expenses, so if they had a way not to pay for gyms, they would be more willing to do workouts. There are the impact of public facilities is perfectly understandable. Despite this attitude, some claim that it is more practical to raise people's Awareness. There is a great deal of evidence to support this. For example. A recent survey showed that the majority of people have no idea. About their health problems. In some cases, even athletes need to be given some information about their health, as the rest of the society. Actually, this study reinforces the importance of making people aware of diseases and body requirements, healthy diets, exercises and so forth. To sum up, Although the effect of sports facilities is Considerable, the lack of knowledge has undeniable impact The discussion around health issue is a controversial one, but I believe that the importance of education is more justified, because it will give them an appropriate vision for caring themselves more efficiently.
It has
been argued
that it will bring such a
good
public
health
improvement, if
people
have more sports facilities, while nowadays
some
other
people
believe that other factors are of prime importance in these issues. I lean a
little bit
toward the second group belief, this essay will
discuss about the
effect of making facilities more reachable, and
on the other hand
how
important
role Educations can play.

From one perspective, it would be a
good
way to encourage
people
to do sports more or
just
start
it. In the modern world,
people
have
many
different
life expenses,
so
if they had a way not to pay for gyms, they would be more willing to do workouts. There are the impact of public facilities is
perfectly
understandable.

Despite this attitude,
some
claim that it is more practical to raise
people
's Awareness. There is a great deal of evidence to support this.
For example
. A recent survey
showed
that the majority of
people
have no
idea
. About their
health
problems. In
some
cases, even athletes need to be
given
some
information about their
health
, as the rest of the society. Actually, this study reinforces the importance of making
people
aware of diseases and body requirements, healthy diets, exercises and
so
forth.

To sum up, Although the effect of sports facilities is Considerable, the lack of knowledge has undeniable impact The discussion around
health
issue is a controversial one,
but
I believe that the importance of education is more justified,
because
it will give them an appropriate vision for caring themselves more
efficiently
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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