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You are getting married soon. Write a letter to your friend from a different country and invite him/her to the wedding. In your letter– Describe your future wife/husband. – What will happen at the wedding? – Why do you want to invite him/her? v.1

You are getting married soon. Write a letter to your friend from a different country and invite him/her to the wedding. In your letter– Describe your future wife/husband. – What will happen at the wedding? – Why do you want to invite him/her? v. 1
It is sometimes argued that tourists from overseas should be charged more than the local residents to visit important sites and monuments. I completely disagree with this opinion. To the favour side of foreign visitors, they are already paying extra amount to the host countries in the form of travel tax. In addition, contributes to the economy of visiting provinces by bearing expenses for their accommodation including food, purchase souvenirs, travel etc. Moreover, local residents raise funds such as subsidies, taxes to maintain the historical buildings and also, state government has been allocating yearly some amount to take care of damages and renovations. I personally believe, those are more than enough to preserve and protect their cultural heritage. So, local inhabitance as well as government should feel proud, happy and responsible to contribute to their own country which in turns encourage more and more tourist towards their land and consequently helps to increase their economy. Another important point to be noted here is that, if tourists aware that they are being charged more comparing to local people then they would opt for other alternative regions. In other words, people neglect this place from their visiting list and they do not even recommend it to their friends and family members. Eventually, this will have a drastic impact on the reputation of the country which also raises the risk of insufficient funds. For instant, In UK important tourist attraction places like Saint Paul's cathedral and Winsor castle are collecting the same amount of entry fee regardless of their nationality. So, showing equality between various country people raises the country’s level of standard worldwide. In conclusion, it is each and every individual responsibility to contribute their money to take care of their own cultural and historical heritage and it’s not fair to place the local’s financial needs on the heads of tourists in the form of tax.
It is
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sometimes
argued that
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tourists
from overseas should
be charged
more than the
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local
residents to visit
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important
sites and monuments. I completely disagree with this opinion.

To the
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favour
side of foreign visitors, they are already paying extra amount to the host
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countries
in the form of travel tax.
In addition
, contributes to the economy of visiting provinces by bearing expenses for their accommodation including food,
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purchase
souvenirs, travel etc.
Moreover
,
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local
residents raise funds such as subsidies, taxes to maintain the historical buildings and
also
, state
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government
has been allocating yearly
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some
amount to take care of damages and renovations. I
personally
believe, those are more than
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enough
to preserve and protect their cultural heritage.
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So
,
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local
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inhabitance
as well
as
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government
should feel proud, happy and responsible to contribute to their
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own
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country
which in turns encourage more and more
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tourist
towards their land and
consequently
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helps
to increase their economy.

Another
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important
point to
be noted
here is that, if
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tourists
aware that they are
being charged
more comparing to
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local
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people
then they would opt for other alternative regions.
In other words
,
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people
neglect this place from their visiting
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list and
they do not even recommend it to their friends and family members.

Eventually
, this will have a drastic impact on the reputation of the
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country
which
also
raises the
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risk
of insufficient funds. For instant, In UK
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important
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tourist
attraction places like Saint Paul's cathedral and
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Winsor
castle are collecting the same amount of entry fee regardless of their nationality.
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So
, showing equality between various
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country
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
raises
the
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country’s
level of standard worldwide.

In conclusion
, it is each and every individual responsibility to contribute their money to take care of their
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own
cultural and historical heritage and it’s not
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fair
to place the
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local’s
financial needs on the heads of
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tourists
in the form of tax.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay You are getting married soon. Write a letter to your friend from a different country and invite him/her to the wedding. In your letter– Describe your future wife/husband. – What will happen at the wedding? – Why do you want to invite him/her? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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