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Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned Write a letter to your friend inviting him her to join instead Please say Where and when do you plan to go Why can t your brother come Give a short description of the trip v.1

Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned Write a letter to your friend inviting him her to join instead Please say Where and when do you plan to go Why can t your brother come Give a short description of the trip v. 1
In the United Kingdom, aged people spend their lives in old age homes where caretakers look after their health and medications. While, some people believe that the authority has the responsibility to pay for the old age homes, others opine that it is the duty of the families to incur the cost. This essay agrees that it is the responsibility of the political party in power because firstly, people pay huge taxes to the ministry for such amenities and secondly, families are already burdened to meet the expenses of their children and other basic needs. Elderly people have paid a huge amount of tariffs for the development of basic infrastructures, thus it is the duty of the authority to ensure that grey-haired people are getting basic facilities and a warm environment. This is to say, taxes of people should be invested in building retirement homes where old people can spend their time with people of their age group along with professional nurses who will be able to take the obligation of their physical and mental health. As a result elderly people will not have to worry about their expenses. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by Oxford University found that more than 80 percent of aging people believe that the ministry should pay for the old age homes. Furthermore, families of older people are already burdened with several responsibilities and thus, they cannot incur extra costs for retirement homes. In other words, the children of older people have to pay for their kids' education, insurance, food, and bills, since they are already burdened they cannot take the obligation for the payment of retirement home. For instance, a recent study by The Times showed that more than 60 percent of the families of older people have financial burdens and constraints and hence, they are not able to pay their care and well being. To conclude, although some people believe that families must incur the expenses of old people's wellbeing and safekeeping. However, In my opinion, I vehemently agree that the ministry should ensure to take care of older people as they have paid huge taxes to the ministry and the families already have huge financial stress.
In the United Kingdom, aged
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people
spend their
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lives
in
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old
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age
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homes
where caretakers look after their health and medications. While,
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some
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people
believe that the authority has the responsibility to
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pay
for the
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old
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age
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homes
, others opine that it is the duty of the
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families
to incur the cost. This essay
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agrees
that it is the responsibility of the political party in power
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because
firstly
,
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people
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pay
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huge
taxes to the ministry for such amenities and
secondly
,
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families
are
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already
burdened to
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meet
the expenses of their children and other basic needs.

Elderly
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people
have paid a
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huge
amount of tariffs for the development of basic infrastructures,
thus
it is the duty of the authority to ensure that
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grey-haired
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people
are getting basic facilities and a warm environment. This is to say, taxes of
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people
should
be invested
in building retirement
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homes
where
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old
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people
can spend their time with
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people
of their
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age
group along with professional nurses who will be able to take the obligation of their physical and mental health.
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As
a result elderly
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people
will not
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have to
worry about their expenses. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by Oxford University found that more than 80 percent of aging
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people
believe that the ministry should
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pay
for the
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old
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age
homes.

Furthermore
,
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families
of
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older
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people
are
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already
burdened with several responsibilities and
thus
, they cannot incur extra costs for retirement
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homes
.
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, the children of
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older
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people
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have to
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pay
for their kids' education, insurance, food, and bills, since they are
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already
burdened they cannot take the obligation for the payment of retirement home.
For instance
, a recent study by The Times
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showed
that more than 60 percent of the
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families
of
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older
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people
have financial burdens and constraints and
hence
, they are not able to
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pay
their care and
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well being
.

To conclude
, although
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people
believe that
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families
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must
incur the expenses of
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old
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people
's
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wellbeing
and safekeeping.
However
, In my opinion, I
vehemently
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agree
that the ministry should ensure to take care of
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older
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people
as they have paid
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huge
taxes to the ministry and the
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families
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already
have
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huge
financial
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stress
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned Write a letter to your friend inviting him her to join instead Please say Where and when do you plan to go Why can t your brother come Give a short description of the trip v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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