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Write them an Letter about the problem. · Explain why deadlines are important· Describe the effect on other staff of not meeting deadlines· Suggest what they should do about the situation v.1

Write them an Letter about the problem. · Explain why deadlines are important· Describe the effect on other staff of not meeting deadlines· Suggest what they should do about the situation v. 1
With media is developing sharply, so tour becomes easier than in the past. There are so many beautiful countries, where travellers want to explore and enjoy life. Tourism industry, they knew these demands and they try to push tourism growth that increased high income for The Government and local people, but I think that has drawback impacts on the countries where people travel to. From my viewpoint, Tourism industry has many competitors and to attract people from other place to tour their countries. Numbers of tourist have been a rise they tried to advertise, set up promotion and finished these projects. Trees in the forest were cut down; destroyed the natural environment as dig a pond, filled the rivers that disadvantage impacts the ecological environment. Additionally, travellers who have narrow knowledge brought garbages, plastic bottles, bags and bad behaviour in the country that they go to. Moreover, local people who have bad habit they rose price from 1 to 5. They tried to charge high level because they thought that tourist has just come one or two times. They lost their confidence with local people. For example, if you went to Vung Tau 10 years ago, you were very surprised that along the beach had many sewages, food was terrible but the price was expensive. Avoiding the negative effects of tourism on local cultures and environments, firstly travel agency must issue rules for tourists as everyone should use one bottle, throw trash in a dustbin, clean up, wash away graffiti if not we can punish. Second, local people must ability and a strength of will for protecting environment and required people accept these rules where they visit. In conclusion, The more Tourism industry is a raise, the more people have to learn how to protect the natural status so that the culture and the local climate are always beautiful and green.
With media is developing
sharply
,
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so
tour becomes easier than in the past. There are
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so
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many
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beautiful
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countries
, where
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travellers
want to explore and enjoy life.
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Tourism
industry, they knew these
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demands and
they try to push
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tourism
growth that increased high income for The
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Government
and
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local
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people
,
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but
I
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think
that has drawback impacts on the
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countries
where
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people
travel to.

From my viewpoint,
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Tourism
industry has
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many
competitors and to attract
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people
from other place to tour their
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countries
. Numbers of tourist have been a rise they tried to advertise, set up promotion and finished these projects. Trees in the forest were
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cut
down;
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destroyed
the natural
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environment
as dig a pond, filled the rivers that disadvantage impacts the ecological
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environment
.
Additionally
,
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travellers
who have narrow knowledge brought
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garbages
, plastic bottles, bags and
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bad
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behaviour
in the
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country
that they go to.
Moreover
,
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local
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people
who have
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bad
habit they rose price from 1 to 5. They tried to charge high level
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because
they
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thought
that tourist has
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just
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come
one or two times. They lost their confidence with
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local
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people
.
For example
, if you went to
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Vung
Tau 10 years ago, you were
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very
surprised that along the beach had
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many
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sewages
, food was terrible
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but
the price was expensive.

Avoiding the
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negative
effects of
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tourism
on
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local
cultures and
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environments
,
firstly
travel agency
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must
issue
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rules
for tourists as everyone should
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use
one bottle, throw trash in a dustbin, clean up, wash away graffiti if not we can punish. Second,
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local
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
ability and a strength of will for protecting
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environment
and required
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people
accept these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
where they visit.

In conclusion
, The more
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Tourism
industry is a raise, the more
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people
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have to
learn how to protect the natural status
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the culture and the
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local
climate are always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
and green.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write them an Letter about the problem. · Explain why deadlines are important· Describe the effect on other staff of not meeting deadlines· Suggest what they should do about the situation v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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