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Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wait until the class or meeting is o v.1

Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wait until the class or meeting is o v. 1
It is commonly argued that the primary goal of every employee is to focus on his/her job duties, while being on good terms with colleagues is not crucial. Although I agree that being productive at work is more important than trying to befriend all colleagues, I think that it is advantageous to have at least a few friends in the workplace. On the one hand, maintaining good relations with all co-workers is often hard and even counter-productive. Firstly, it is very emotionally demanding to forge friendships in the office. It is almost impossible to cater for every colleague’s needs and interests, be nice even with people who irritate you, and make friends under stressful conditions. Moreover, sometimes it is wiser to eschew the niceties of interaction in favor of productivity. For instance, if all people were trying to build good relationships with everyone in their workplace, much less work would be done. On the other hand, there are many compelling reasons to get closer to our colleagues. First of all, it is very beneficial to build warm relationships with those who surround you most of the time. Many full-time employees spend more of their waking hours with co-workers than they do with their families. And thus, people who have a few friends in their offices are usually happier than their solitary peers. Secondly, good interpersonal relations result in an improved teamwork. It is not a secret that team members who like and respect each other tend to collaborate on a project more effectively. In conclusion, we need to find a healthy balance between being productive at work and forming social bonds. The ideal option is to find friends in the workplace, but not at the cost of our own productivity.
It is
commonly
argued that the primary goal of every employee is to focus on his/her job duties, while being on
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good
terms with
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colleagues
is not crucial. Although I
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agree
that being productive at work is more
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important
than trying to befriend all
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colleagues
, I
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think
that it is advantageous to have at least a few
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friends
in the workplace.

On the one hand, maintaining
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good
relations with all co-workers is
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often
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hard
and even counter-productive.
Firstly
, it is
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very
emotionally
demanding to forge friendships in the office. It is almost impossible to cater for every
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colleague’s
needs and interests, be nice even with
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people
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who
irritate you, and
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make
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friends
under stressful conditions.
Moreover
,
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sometimes
it is wiser to eschew the niceties of interaction in favor of productivity.
For instance
, if all
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people
were trying to build
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good
relationships with everyone in their workplace, much less work would
be done
.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
compelling reasons to
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get
closer to our
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colleagues
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it is
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very
beneficial to build warm relationships with those
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who
surround you most of the time.
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Many
full-time employees spend more of their waking hours with co-workers than they do with their families. And
thus
,
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people
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who
have a few
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friends
in their offices are
usually
happier than their solitary peers.
Secondly
,
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good
interpersonal relations result in an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
teamwork. It is not a secret that team members
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who
like and respect each other tend to collaborate on a project more
effectively
.

In conclusion
, we need to find a healthy balance between being productive at work and forming social bonds. The ideal option is to find
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
in the workplace,
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but
not at the cost of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
productivity.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wait until the class or meeting is o v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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