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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. v. 3
It is argued that having a personal vehicle such as a car has more side effects than its benefits. This essay totally disagrees with this statement because a personal motor car provides confidence to travel faster with own suitable time and it shows a posh social position. However, it has some negative results to the road transportations and on the environments. One the main advantages of having an automobile or ridings on it often gives mental satisfactions to reach the destination on a personal convenient time. Travelling on a public transportation need to follow the timetable of the transportation company and if you miss one ride, you might need to wait for half an hour which is a waste of time. Moreover, waiting for city bus or trains sometimes does not justify an individual's personal status. Some people have more money and they love to show their position by buying luxury vehicles like BMW, Merchedis Bench, Ford Indigo, etc. Therefore, if someone can effort a car, they should buy it for their personal satisfaction and it gives his social rank as per his wealth. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages of having too many cars on the roads. One of the main issues is that it creates lots of traffic. When there are lots of vehicles, the road-transportation authority needs to regulate the numbers. For example, we can take Singapore, where the authorities strictly monitor number of personal cars. In fact, people need to apply to the governments before they want to buy a new car. Another negative impact of having too many automobiles is that it causes harm to the environment by emission Carbondioxcide. For instance, Bangladesh Road Transport Corporations banned three wheelers few years back due to air pollution in Dhaka City. So it is necessary to monitor the number of vehicles and their engine status regularly to have less impact on the environment. In conclusion, some people claim that cars have more disadvantages because of the impact on the environment and it creates long traffic, but it also gives pleasure to people who can buy. It is predicted that in the future people will have more cars because of the improvement of social status and government will regulate the number of vehicles and their conditions to run.
It
is argued
that
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having
a
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personal
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vehicle
such as a
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car
has more side effects than its benefits. This essay
totally
disagrees with this statement
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because
a
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personal
motor
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car
provides confidence to travel faster with
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own
suitable time and it
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shows
a posh social position.
However
, it has
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some
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negative
results to the road transportations and on the environments.

One the main advantages of
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having
an automobile or
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ridings on
it
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often
gives mental satisfactions to reach the destination on a
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personal
convenient time. Travelling on a public transportation
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need
to follow the timetable of the transportation
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company
and if you miss one ride, you might
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need
to wait for half an hour which is a waste of time.
Moreover
, waiting for city bus or trains
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sometimes
does not justify an individual's
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personal
status.
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Some
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people
have more
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money and
they
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love
to
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show
their position by buying luxury
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vehicles
like BMW,
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Merchedis
Bench, Ford Indigo, etc.
Therefore
, if someone
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can effort
a
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car
, they should
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buy
it for their
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personal
satisfaction and it gives his social rank as per his wealth.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
disadvantages of
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having
too
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many
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cars
on the roads. One of the main issues is that it creates lots of traffic. When there are lots of
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vehicles
, the road-transportation authority
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needs
to regulate the
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numbers
.
For example
, we can take Singapore, where the authorities
strictly
monitor
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number
of
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personal
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cars
. In fact,
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people
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need
to apply to the
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governments
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before
they want to
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buy
a new
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car
. Another
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negative
impact of
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having
too
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many
automobiles is that it causes harm to the environment by emission
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Carbondioxcide
.
For instance
, Bangladesh Road Transport Corporations banned three
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wheelers
few years back due to air pollution in Dhaka City.
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So
it is necessary to monitor the
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number
of
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vehicles
and their engine status
regularly
to have less impact on the environment.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
claim that
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cars
have more disadvantages
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because
of the impact on the environment and it creates long traffic,
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but
it
also
gives pleasure to
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people
who can
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buy
. It
is predicted
that in the future
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people
will have more
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cars
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because
of the improvement of social status and
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government
will regulate the
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number
of
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vehicles
and their conditions to run.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
382 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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