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hildapart 2describe a meeting you remember going to at work, college or school. 1. when and where the meeting was held2. who was at the meeting3. what the people at the meeting talked about and explain why you remember going to this meeting v.1

hildapart 2describe a meeting you remember going to at work, college or school. 1. when and where the meeting was held2. who was at the meeting3. what the people at the meeting talked about and explain why you remember going to this meeting v. 1
Libraries used to be the source of the information, but in the age of the internet they become not important. While some people believe they are irrelevant and should not be funded, others argue that they are important and should be funded. In my opinion, I agree with this statement to some extent as libraries still the main source of the information and the governments need to allocate the required money to develop them. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion. To begin with, there are several reasons why libraries are not important in the age of the internet. Firstly, the internet contains a wide range of information from different sources. When a researcher needs to get detail about a certain topic like economy, they can get the information explained in detail with a single click. For example, students considered the internet as the reference for their studies and development. Secondly, since the internet is available online from anywhere and anytime, researchers find it more convenient as a reference for their researches. Accordingly, most of them depend totally on the internet as the primary source to gain knowledge and information. Furthermore, libraries are not less important than the internet. As libraries are designed to be the second home for the readers, they are considered the quietest place to enjoy reading a book. It is usually the prime location for any student who is looking for peaceful reading time. For instance, libraries are the second home for the university students where they learn and read books. Additionally, libraries contain publications that are not available online. Therefore, libraries are the only place researchers need to visit when they need to access these books. To sum up, the internet has many added values to the readers such as it can be accessible from anywhere, but libraries are the root of the information and it should be publicly funded by the government. I profoundly believe that the internet has changed the way of the data accessed, however, libraries are important and government should ensure maintaining and funding them.
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. In my opinion, I
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agree
with this statement to
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some
extent as libraries
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governments
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need
to allocate the required money to develop them. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion.

To
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begin
with, there are several reasons why libraries are not
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important
in the age of the internet.
Firstly
, the internet contains a wide range of
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information
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sources
. When a researcher
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needs
to
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get
detail about a certain topic like economy, they can
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information
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explained
in detail with a single click.
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Accordingly
, most of them depend
totally
on the internet as the primary
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source
to gain knowledge and information.

Furthermore
, libraries are not less
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important
than the internet. As libraries
are designed
to be the second home for the readers, they
are considered
the quietest place to enjoy reading a book. It is
usually
the prime location for any student who is looking for peaceful reading time.
For instance
, libraries are the second home for the university students where they learn and read books.
Additionally
, libraries contain publications that are not available online.
Therefore
, libraries are the
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only
place researchers
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to visit when they
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need
to access these books.

To sum up, the internet has
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many
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added
values to the readers such as it can be accessible from anywhere,
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but
libraries are the root of the
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information
and it should be
publicly
funded by the
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government
. I
profoundly
believe that the internet has
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changed
the way of the data accessed,
however
, libraries are
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important
and
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government
should ensure maintaining and funding them.
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IELTS essay hildapart 2describe a meeting you remember going to at work, college or school. 1. when and where the meeting was held2. who was at the meeting3. what the people at the meeting talked about and explain why you remember going to this meeting v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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