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Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss your opinions about the positive and negative aspects of online shopping. Include reasons and any revelant examples to support your answer. You should write at least 250 words. v.1

Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss your opinions about the positive and negative aspects of online shopping. Include reasons and any revelant examples to support your answer. v. 1
It is true that online shopping plays a crucial in our lives. While some people, especially those with a limited time budget, regard online shopping as a positive development since they can buy products at home or office without having to go to stores or shopping malls. However, there are those who argue that making online transactions can be advantageous to them in several ways. My essay will discuss both the positive and negative aspects of online shopping. On the one hand, there are many positve aspects of online shopping. First and foremost, doing shopping helps people to save time. This means that they only need search key word, click mouse, press enter and wait. Secondly, online shopping is really convenient. Because people can buy products at home or office without having to go to stores or shopping malls. Thirdly, shopping on the Internet can have many informations and reviews in order to make sure the genuine products. On the other hand, in addition to the important advantages of this problem, it has some disadvantages. In fact, people have this opinion because customers can be cheated. They usually are subjective when they order low quality products. An additional drawback of online shopping is that it makes people feel more lazy and bored. Moreover, doing shopping on the Internet In conclusion, the above mentioned facts have outlined the benefits as well as the drawbacks of this issue. Its disadvantages should be taken into account. People should take advantage of the pros anh minimize the cons of this issue.
It is true that
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plays a crucial in our
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lives
. While
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some
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people
,
especially
those with a limited time budget, regard
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online
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shopping
as a
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positive
development since they can
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buy
products at home or office without having to go to stores or
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shopping
malls.
However
, there are those who argue that making
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online
transactions can be advantageous to them in several ways. My essay will discuss both the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of
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online
shopping.

On the one hand, there are
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many
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positve
aspects of
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online
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shopping
.
First
and foremost, doing
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shopping
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helps
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people
to save time. This means that they
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only
need search key word, click mouse, press enter and wait.
Secondly
,
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online
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shopping
is
really
convenient.
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Because
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people
can
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buy
products at home or office without having to go to stores or
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shopping
malls.
Thirdly
,
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shopping
on the Internet can have
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many
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informations
and reviews in order to
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make
sure the genuine products.

On the other hand
,
in addition
to the
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important
advantages of this problem, it has
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some
disadvantages. In fact,
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people
have this opinion
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because
customers can
be cheated
. They
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usually are
subjective when they order low quality products. An additional drawback of
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online
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shopping
is that it
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makes
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people
feel more lazy and bored.
Moreover
, doing
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shopping
on the Internet

In conclusion
, the above mentioned facts have outlined the benefits
as well
as the drawbacks of this issue. Its disadvantages should
be taken
into account.
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People
should take advantage of the pros
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anh
minimize the cons of this issue.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss your opinions about the positive and negative aspects of online shopping. Include reasons and any revelant examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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