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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? v. 1
In today’s day and age, where we spend most of our time chasing wealth and material gains, I agree that a person’s worth these days is mostly judged based on social status and material possessions. However, old-fashioned values such as trust, kindness and honour still play an important role in forging deep, meaningful relationships. In my personal opinion, I think when it comes to first impressions, we do judge a person’s worth by their material possessions and social status. For example, when we meet someone dressed to the nines, we instantly deem them as being good and worthy of our respect. On the contrary, when we come across underprivileged individuals or poverty-stricken individuals, we tend to look at the person in a different light. A quick scroll through social networking sites such as Instagram, Facebook would prove the same. The current society worships celebrities and social media influencers such as Kardashians more than Noble Peace award winners such as Malala Yousafzai. These celebrities and social media influencers have thousands if not millions of followers. They are looked up to as role models and given platforms to share their views simply because of their wealth and social status. However, when it comes to forging deep, meaningful relationships, we look past the social status and material possessions and old-fashioned values such as trust, kindness and honour are given more weight in determining a person’s worth. We still expect our partner, family members, friends and community to be trustworthy, to be kind and to do the right thing. When we get to know someone on a personal level, we make values such as trust, honour and honesty the basis of the relationship. Additionally, even with celebrities and famous people, when the individual has wronged or acted in such a manner that they don’t embody the right values and morals, society condemns the actions and judges the wrong doer accordingly. To conclude, I believe that we only judge a person’s worth by their social status and material possessions when we first meet them but as the relationship deepens, we measure the person’s worth by their values and morals.
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impressions, we do judge a
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by their
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material
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possessions
and
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status
.
For example
, when we
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meet
someone dressed to the nines, we
instantly
deem them as being
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good
and worthy of our respect.
On the contrary
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across underprivileged individuals or poverty-stricken individuals, we tend to look at the
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in a
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light.

A quick scroll through
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networking sites such as Instagram, Facebook would prove the same. The
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society worships celebrities and
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media influencers such as
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Kardashians
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award winners such as Malala Yousafzai. These celebrities and
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media influencers have thousands if not millions of followers. They
are looked
up to as role models and
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given
platforms to share their views
simply
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of their wealth and
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status.

However
, when it
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comes
to forging deep, meaningful relationships, we look past the
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social
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status
and
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material
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possessions
and
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old
-fashioned values such as trust, kindness and
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honour
are
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more weight in determining a
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. We
still
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expect
our partner, family members, friends and community to be trustworthy, to be kind and to do the right thing. When we
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to know someone on a personal level, we
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values such as trust,
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and honesty the basis of the relationship.
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, even with celebrities and
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, when the individual has wronged or acted in such a manner that they don’t embody the right values and morals, society condemns the actions and judges the
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doer
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.

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, I believe that we
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judge a
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by their
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when we
first
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them
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as the relationship deepens, we measure the
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by their values and morals.
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IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? v. 1

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