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Tourism has become one of the fastest growing industries in the world. Millions of people today are travelling father and father throughout the year. Some people argue that the development of tourism has had negative effects on local communities, others think that its influences are positive Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss the effects of tourism on local communities. Include reasons and any relevant examples to support your answer. v.2

Tourism has become one of the fastest growing industries in the world. Millions of people today are travelling father and father throughout the year. Some people argue that the development of tourism has had negative effects on local communities, others think that its influences are positive Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss the effects of tourism on local communities. Include reasons and any relevant examples to support your answer. v. 2
Nowadays, owing to the fact that there has been a dramatic increase in tourism, several people claim that the development of tourism brings some bad influences to local areas, whereas others believe they receive various benefits from it. This essay will discuss both sides of this issue. On the one hand, there is no doubt that tourism brings numerous positive impacts on local regions. Firstly, Tourism provides local people opportunity to boost the local economy. The local communities can gain profits from supplying goods and services to visitors. To exemplify, the more tourists come, the more entertainment services are opened to meet their needs, which helps create greater profits for the local economy. In addition, tourism may help the local citizens have jobs. For example, the local people may work in tourist service areas which are opened by the government or run small shops like restaurants or souvenir shops to make ends meet. Thus, tourism can be seen to improve the dwellers’ living conditions and simultaneously reduce the unemployment rate. Secondly, the development of tourism can promote the imagine of a local area to other parts of the country or to other countries. Tourists visiting the local areas may post their photos on Facebook or Instagram or check in at the tourist destinations so that the local regions will become more famous and attract more tourists. On the other hand, the development of tourism may still trigger some negative effects. Initially, tourism can often cause environmental damage with risks like pollution, the loss of habitants and forest fires. Tourist can throw garbage in the environment improperly, which lead to environmental pollution like air pollution and water pollution. In addition, a number of forests and mountains may be destroyed for resort construction, which causes ecological imbalance and the loss of wildlife habitats. Another drawback of the proliferation of tourism is that the tourists from many cultures as well as regions may bring many bad habits to the visited countries. For instance, in Vietnam, since the travel industry in cities has developed rapidly, there is an alarming increase in the number of social evils such as crimes, prostitutions or pick pocket. In conclusion, for all the points mentioned above, the advantages of tourism outweigh its disadvantages. However, the government also have to provide some effective solutions in order to limit the negative effects of tourism on the local communities.
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, several
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people
claim that the development of
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brings
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some
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bad
influences to
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local
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areas
, whereas others believe they receive various benefits from it. This essay will discuss both sides of this issue.

On the one hand, there is no doubt that
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tourism
brings numerous
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positive
impacts on
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local
regions.
Firstly
,
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provides
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local
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people
opportunity to boost the
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local
economy. The
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local
communities can gain profits from supplying
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goods
and services to visitors. To exemplify, the more
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tourists
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come
, the more entertainment services
are opened
to
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meet
their needs, which
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helps
create greater profits for the
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local
economy.
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,
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tourism
may
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help
the
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local
citizens have jobs.
For example
, the
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local
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people
may work in
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service
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areas
which
are opened
by the
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government
or run
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small
shops like restaurants or souvenir shops to
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make
ends
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meet
.
Thus
,
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tourism
can be
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seen
to
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improve
the dwellers’ living conditions and
simultaneously
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reduce
the unemployment rate.
Secondly
, the development of
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can promote
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the imagine
of a
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local
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area
to
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other
parts of the country or to
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other
countries.
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Tourists
visiting the
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local
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areas
may post their photos on Facebook or Instagram or
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check
in at the
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destinations
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so
that the
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local
regions will become more
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famous
and attract more tourists.

On the
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hand, the development of
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may
still
trigger
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negative
effects.
Initially
,
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can
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often
cause environmental damage with
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risks
like
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pollution
, the loss of habitants and forest fires.
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Tourist
can throw garbage in the environment
improperly
, which lead to environmental
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pollution
like air
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pollution
and water
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pollution
.
In addition
, a number of forests and mountains may be
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destroyed
for resort construction, which causes ecological imbalance and the loss of wildlife habitats. Another drawback of the proliferation of
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tourism
is that the
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tourists
from
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many
cultures
as well
as regions may bring
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many
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bad
habits to the visited countries.
For instance
, in Vietnam, since the travel industry in cities has developed
rapidly
, there is an alarming increase in the number of social evils such as crimes,
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prostitutions
or pick pocket.

In conclusion
, for all the points mentioned above, the advantages of
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tourism
outweigh its disadvantages.
However
, the
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government
also
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have to
provide
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effective solutions in order to limit the
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negative
effects of
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on the
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local
communities.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Tourism has become one of the fastest growing industries in the world. Millions of people today are travelling father and father throughout the year. Some people argue that the development of tourism has had negative effects on local communities, others think that its influences are positive Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss the effects of tourism on local communities. Include reasons and any relevant examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
397 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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