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Write about the following topic: Some people think that cooking is an important skill for young people to learn. Others believe that it is better for people to learn how to cook after they become adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.1

: Some people think that cooking is an important skill for young people to learn. Others believe that it is better for people to learn how to cook after they become adults. v. 1
Nowadays, both children and parents have a hectic pace of life so it can be hard for the young to learn the skills required to make a meal. However, I believe kids should be taught to cook at an early age as opposed to waiting until adulthood. Many children have a keen interest in food and do not want to rely on their parents for everything. At a young age it’s a good idea for kids to develop knowledge of food. In this way they will make more informed choices about what they eat and they may refuse junk food which is a popular meal choice in the schoolyard. Additionally, if children are taught to cook they will be more independent and will be able to prepare healthy meals for themselves at times when their parents are too busy with work. There are few people who believe children should only focus on study and that cooking can be quite dangerous. These parents are quite obsessed with their children’s academic records and want them to only focus on schoolwork. However, in the long run surely it is more important to develop skills that can help you live a healthy life than to do well on one exam. Also, while kitchens can be scary places with knives and fire, if parents are responsible and give supervision to their kids, then cooking will not be a dangerous activity. To conclude, it’s clear that while the importance of study and the dangers of cooking shouldn’t be overlooked, they can both be managed and children should be able to develop their own independence and cooking skills.
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be taught
to cook at an early age as opposed to waiting until adulthood.

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children
have a keen interest in food and do not want to rely on their
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parents
for everything. At a young age it’s a
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good
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for kids to develop knowledge of food. In this way they will
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make
more informed choices about what they
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eat and
they may refuse junk food which is a popular meal choice in the schoolyard.
Additionally
, if
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children
are taught
to cook they will be more independent and will be able to prepare healthy meals for themselves at times when their
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parents
are too busy with work.

There are few
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people
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only
focus on study and that cooking can be quite
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dangerous
. These
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parents
are quite obsessed with their
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children’s
academic records and want them to
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only
focus on schoolwork.
However
, in the long run
surely
it is more
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to develop
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skills
that can
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help
you
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live
a healthy life than to do well on one exam.
Also
, while kitchens can be scary places with knives and fire, if
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parents
are responsible and give supervision to their kids, then cooking will not be a
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dangerous
activity.

To conclude
, it’s
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clear
that while the importance of study and the
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dangers
of cooking shouldn’t
be overlooked
, they can both
be managed
and
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children
should be able to develop their
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own
independence and cooking
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skills
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IELTS essay : Some people think that cooking is an important skill for young people to learn. Others believe that it is better for people to learn how to cook after they become adults. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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