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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in cinema. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in cinema. 2
Entertainment has become a crucial part of human life. Many thinkers believe that movies are best enjoyed on big screens of a movie theatre rather than on small screens of mobiles. This essay will delve into both these views, along with my personal opinion. On one hand, watching films on phones and tablets is convenient as these small devices are portable and are easily accessible. For instance, many persons of the working class are often seen watching movies in local trains and buses while travelling from work to home. Moreover, watching cinema on these gadgets is much cheaper as compared to a cineplex as an individual, in order to watch a movie in theatre, have to spend a hefty amount of money on travelling and on buying other eatables from the cinema itself. On the other hand, a Cineplex offers wider screens with excellent graphics and a better sound quality which provides a larger than life experience to the audience while watching an entertaining film. Additionally, the motion pictures which are viewed on laptops and gadgets are mostly pirated, and seeing a feature film free of cost will ultimately affect the makers of movies and those who are engaged in the movie industry to earn their living, thus, adversely disturbing the economy as a whole. To illustrate, a research by a popular magazine has shown that around 50 directors in India are declared bankrupt each year because of illegal reproduction of their movies. To conclude, albeit there are many advantages of watching films on the handheld devices as they are handier and less costly, however, in my opinion, the theatres provide an extremely satisfying, joyous and interesting experience as compared to small screens and must be preferred.
Entertainment has become a crucial part of human life.
Many
thinkers believe that
movies
are best enjoyed on
big
screens
of a
movie
theatre
rather
than on
small
screens
of mobiles. This essay will delve into both these views, along with my personal opinion.

On one hand, watching films on phones and tablets is convenient as these
small
devices are portable and are
easily
accessible.
For instance
,
many
persons of the working
class
are
often
seen
watching
movies
in local trains and buses while travelling from work to home.
Moreover
, watching cinema on these gadgets is much cheaper
as
compared to a
cineplex
as an individual, in order to
watch
a
movie
in
theatre
,
have to
spend a hefty amount of money on travelling and on buying other eatables from the cinema itself.

On the other hand
, a Cineplex offers wider
screens
with excellent graphics and a better sound quality which provides a larger than life experience to the audience while watching an entertaining film.
Additionally
, the motion pictures which
are viewed
on laptops and gadgets are
mostly
pirated, and seeing a feature film free of cost will
ultimately
affect the makers of
movies
and those who
are engaged
in the
movie
industry to earn their living,
thus
,
adversely
disturbing the economy as a whole. To illustrate,
a research
by a popular magazine has shown that around 50 directors in India
are declared
bankrupt each year
because
of illegal reproduction of their movies.

To conclude
, albeit there are
many
advantages of watching films on the handheld devices as they are handier and less costly,
however
, in my opinion, the
theatres
provide an
extremely
satisfying, joyous and interesting experience as compared to
small
screens
and
must
be preferred
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in cinema. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
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