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Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. v. 2
It is often a debated topic that the government should spend revenue on constructing new structures such as museums or town forums rather than restoring the existing monuments. Although I agree that it is essential to protect constructions from the past, I also do not think spending on public buildings is a waste of money. There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of budget on the restoration of historical buildings. First and foremost, they stand as a sentinel of time representing the worth of our ancestors. For example, pyramids of Eygpt are piles of mystery yet to be solved. Every time they explain something related to it, they are discovering unique attributes of our history. Every remain of them at present often represents our cultural heritage. Secondly, they can generate income as tourist sights as well as creating jobs. So many survey statistics have already proven it. However, it does not mean that the construction of new buildings should be neglected. To begin, it is not possible to protect all historical buildings, some of them are unrepairable and so should be demolished, so a better architecture can be built. Moreover, maintenance of new buildings is a lot easier when compared to their counterparts. On the long term, the government can solve a lot of money which can be used for the better good. To sum up, there are clear benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment into these old buildings as they will influence our present generation. That said, I do not believe spending money on new edifices is a waste of money as this provides essential benefits as well.
It is
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often
a debated topic that the
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government
should spend revenue on constructing
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new
structures such as museums or town forums
rather
than restoring the existing monuments. Although I
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agree
that it is essential to protect constructions from the past, I
also
do not
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think
spending on public
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buildings
is a waste of money.

There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of budget on the restoration of historical
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buildings
.
First
and foremost, they stand as a sentinel of time representing the worth of our ancestors.
For example
, pyramids of
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Eygpt
are piles of mystery
yet
to
be solved
. Every time they
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explain
something related to it, they are discovering unique attributes of our history. Every remain of them at present
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often
represents our cultural heritage.
Secondly
, they can generate income as tourist sights
as well
as creating jobs.
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So
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many
survey statistics have already proven it.

However
, it does not mean that the construction of
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new
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buildings
should
be neglected
. To
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begin
, it is not possible to protect all historical
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buildings
,
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some
of them are
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unrepairable
and
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so
should
be demolished
,
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so
a better architecture can
be built
.
Moreover
, maintenance of
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new
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buildings
is a lot easier when compared to their counterparts. On the long term, the
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government
can solve
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a lot of
money which can be
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used
for the better
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good
.

To sum up, there are
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clear
benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment into these
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old
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buildings
as they will influence our present generation. That said, I do not believe spending money on
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new
edifices is a waste of money as this provides essential benefits
as well
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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