It is true that the crime rate is increasing in many areas of the world. Many governments react to this problem by building prisons to contain the criminals. This has proved so unsuccessful that each year bigger and tougher prisons are needed. Perhaps we need to go back to the basics of this problem and assess the possible causes.
One of the reasons that are often given is the increase in violence both on television and in computer games. While this may be responsible for making crimes more violent, I think, it is unrealistic to lay the blame for all criminal activity on the media. I think the main cause of the crime is the increasing gap between the rich and the poor, as well as the increasing use of drugs. The majority of crimes are being committed by people in need who are forced to take what they do not have and by people addicted to drugs.
Solving these problems is not easy. We could try to ensure that more jobs are created so that the divide between rich poor is reduced. However, criminals need to be trained and rehabilitated so that they can enter the workforce. Furthermore, providing employment only addresses part of this problem; so far there has been little success in the war against drugs.
I believe that crime will continue to rise, particularly in crowded and overpopulated areas, unless we can find an effective way to address these issues. Perhaps we can help to break the cycle by trying to ensure fewer young people enter a life of crime in the first place. We could do this through education and by making sure that they are able to work.
It is true that the
crime
rate is increasing in
many
areas of the world.
Many
governments
react to this
problem
by building prisons to contain the criminals. This has proved
so
unsuccessful that each year bigger and tougher prisons
are needed
. Perhaps we need to go back to the basics of this
problem
and assess the possible causes.
One of the reasons that are
often
given
is the increase in violence both on television and in computer games. While this may be responsible for making
crimes
more violent, I
think
, it is unrealistic to lay the blame for all criminal activity on the media. I
think
the main cause of the
crime
is the increasing gap between the rich and the poor,
as well
as the increasing
use
of drugs. The majority of
crimes
are
being committed
by
people
in need who
are forced
to take what they do not have and by
people
addicted to drugs.
Solving these
problems
is not easy. We could try to ensure that more jobs
are created
so
that the divide between rich poor is
reduced
.
However
, criminals need to
be trained
and rehabilitated
so
that they can enter the workforce.
Furthermore
, providing employment
only
addresses part of this
problem
;
so
far there has been
little
success in the war against drugs.
I believe that
crime
will continue to rise,
particularly
in crowded and overpopulated areas, unless we can find an effective way to address these issues. Perhaps we can
help
to break the cycle by trying to ensure fewer young
people
enter a life of
crime
in the
first
place. We could do this through education and by making sure that they are able to work.
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