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nowdays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why do they do this? Is it a positive or negative development trend? v.1

nowdays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why do they do this? Is it a positive or negative development trend? v. 1
Browsing on internet has become a more popular trend at global scale. It is stated that nowdays excess work is doing by internet and it is more faster as well as we can know about anything which is happening all over the world in less time. This essay will discuss why is this the case and how it is a more positive trend subsequently. Predominately, in modern era, the use of social media is enhancing rapidly world wide and it is a best source to get knowledge about vital things. since, every nation is getting flourished through internet markedly corders are making best applications through which people can remains close to news and it is piece of cake to use. for example, everyone has own mobile phones and they are using it for their personal purpose such as work study along with to enhance their personality. Hence, every year government is providing free mobile phones to dustitute proponents therefore people are relying on mobile phones and social media. However, internet plays a crucial role in everybody' s life and it made life so easier for every masses. Since, mainly children are using internet daily for their enjoyment and studies but it makes them too latharchic and they do not do any sedentary activity that is not good for their health. for instance, if learners and staff would do excess use of social media, it can give henious effect on their eyesight and mind. Resultantly, it is a wastage of time for school educates and due to that it gives bad impact on their study. Moreover, people are becoming more intelligent through internet because in social media have alot of knowledge available about their interest Apparently, people can aware from danger circumstances because every day reporters give news related to their nation so if there is any chance of dilemma so media do aware folks through news, radio and internet. So it is a positive development for people. Internet have also more crucial benefits for everyone. AS people may earn money without doing hard work and people would found my feet in that work. To illustrate, American application developer made best application for young brigade. If they would use that application, they may enhance their knowledge and can earn a lot of money through that. Hence, internet is the best way to do work and learners should use it for their studies and assignments. To sum up, technology is good but we should use it in limit because the excess use of everything is not good for health and mind. Every masses should use it for important work because it can help in dilemma and also can solve our trouble in few minutes. Every work is doing by internet now days Through internet we can contact in far distance with anyone without and restriction and also we can make bonding with others by social media so it is a more positive developmen
Browsing on internet has become a more popular trend at global scale. It
is stated
that
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nowdays
excess
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work
is doing by internet and it is
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more faster
as well
as
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we


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can
know about anything which is happening all over the world in less time. This essay will discuss why is this the case and how it is a more
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positive
trend
subsequently
.

Predominately
, in modern era, the
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use
of
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social
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media
is enhancing
rapidly
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world wide
and it is
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a
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best
source to
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get
knowledge about vital things.

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since
, every nation is getting flourished
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through
internet
markedly
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corders
are making
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best
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applications
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through
which
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people
can remains close to news and it is
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piece
of cake to
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use
.

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for
example, everyone has
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own
mobile
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phones and
they are using it for their personal purpose such as
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work
study along with to enhance their personality.

Hence
, every year
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government
is providing free mobile phones to
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dustitute
proponents
therefore
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people
are relying on mobile phones and
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social
media.

However
, internet plays a crucial role in
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everybody&
#039; s life and it made life
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so
easier for every
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masses
. Since,
mainly
children are using internet daily for their enjoyment and studies

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but
it
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makes
them too
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latharchic and
they do not do any sedentary activity
that is
not
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good
for their health.
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for
instance, if learners and staff would do excess
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use
of
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social
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media
,
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it


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can
give
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henious
effect on their eyesight and mind.
Resultantly
, it is a wastage of time for school educates and due to that it gives
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bad
impact on their study.

Moreover
,
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people
are becoming more intelligent
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through
internet
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because
in
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social
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media
have
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alot
of knowledge available about their interest

Apparently
,
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people
can aware from
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danger
circumstances
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because
every day reporters give news related to their nation
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so
if there is any chance of dilemma
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so
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media
do aware folks
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through
news, radio and internet.
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So
it is a
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positive
development for
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people
. Internet have
also
more crucial benefits for everyone. AS
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people
may earn money without doing
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hard
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work
and
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people
would
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found
my feet in that
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work
. To illustrate, American
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application
developer made
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best
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application
for young brigade. If they would
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use
that
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application
, they may enhance their knowledge and can earn
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a lot of
money
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through
that.
Hence
, internet is the
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best
way to do
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work
and learners should
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use
it for their studies and assignments.

To sum up, technology is
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good
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but
we should
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use
it in
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limit
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because
the excess
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use
of everything is not
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good
for health and mind. Every
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masses
should
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use
it for
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important
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work
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because
it can
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help
in dilemma and
also
can solve our trouble in few minutes. Every
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work
is doing by internet
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now
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days


Through
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internet we
can contact in far distance with anyone without and restriction and
also
we can
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make
bonding with others by
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social
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media
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so
it is a more
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positive
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developmen
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Mistakes

IELTS essay nowdays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why do they do this? Is it a positive or negative development trend? v. 1

Essay
  American English
13 paragraphs
490 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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