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: Children in some parts of the world have less responsibility compared to children in the past. Some people think this as a positive change; however, others think of it as a negative change. What do you think? Give reasons for v. 1
This contemporary era expects everyone to be technologically literate and advanced. People from all the age groups are using latest gadgets and children are no exception to this. But, many researchers are debating whether to allow children using computers since early childhood or not. This essay will discuss few merits and demerits of overusing such devices by stating some examples from the research done British University and WHO. On the one hand, technology has brought immense uses to society and made our life easy. These days almost all the services are available online, for instance, to order food or to book movie ticket customers are using mobile phones and software application. Doing so is convenient and just a click away. To cope up and stand in the competitive society with a confidence, children should learn computers in early childhood. In addition to this, it has been observed that they have strong grasping power and are a quick learner, which makes them to learn and adapt to the changes swiftly. British University published a paper, which states children have twice the learning capability as compared to adults. This research has shown the importance of learning in early ages. On the other hand, overuse of technological devices such as computers, laptops, iPads and mobile phone may bring few problems to mankind. Firstly, spending uncountable hours in front of the screen may affect one's body posture and may cause strain on the eyes. The research held by WHO states that people who have sedentary work such as work in IT companies, are suffering from back pain and neck pain more as compared to others. This will be more serious, if they start spending too much time in front of the screen from school days. Secondly, websites such as Facebook, YouTube and Instangram are appealing and children found them more attractive, causing them to increasing their screen time about 30 hours per week. This will not only impact their studies and concentrating power, but also isolate them from society. They may start lacking communication skills as they would prefer to discuss over the online medium instead of meeting with their peers in person. Considering all the arguments and examples stated above, it is necessary to learn technology in earlier age to survive in the competitive society; however, one should not overuse. In the near future, although schools will be preferred online mediums to teach students as it is convenient, appealing and interesting, they must be concerned about their negative impacts and should take demerits into account.
This contemporary era
expects
everyone to be
technologically
literate and advanced.
People
from all the age groups are using
latest
gadgets and
children
are no exception to this.
But
,
many
researchers are debating whether to
allow
children
using computers since early childhood or not. This essay will discuss few merits and demerits of overusing such devices by stating
some
examples from the research done British University and WHO.

On the one hand, technology has brought immense
uses
to
society
and made our life easy. These days almost all the services are available online,
for instance
, to order food or to book movie ticket customers are using mobile phones and software application. Doing
so
is convenient and
just
a click away. To cope up and stand in the competitive
society
with a confidence,
children
should learn computers in early childhood.
In addition
to this, it has
been observed
that they have strong grasping power and are a quick learner, which
makes
them to learn and adapt to the
changes
swiftly
. British University published a paper, which states
children
have twice the learning capability as compared to adults. This research has shown the importance of learning in early ages.

On the other hand
, overuse of technological devices such as computers, laptops, iPads and mobile phone may bring few problems to mankind.
Firstly
, spending uncountable hours in front of the screen may affect one's body posture and may cause strain on the eyes. The research held by WHO states that
people
who have sedentary work such as work in IT
companies
, are suffering from back pain and neck pain more
as
compared to others. This will be more serious, if they
start
spending too much time in front of the screen from school days.
Secondly
, websites such as Facebook, YouTube and
Instangram
are appealing and
children
found them more attractive, causing them to increasing their screen time about 30 hours per week. This will not
only
impact their studies and concentrating power,
but
also
isolate them from
society
. They may
start
lacking communication
skills
as they would prefer to discuss over the online medium
instead
of meeting with their peers in person.

Considering all the arguments and examples stated above, it is necessary to learn technology in earlier age to survive in the competitive
society
;
however
, one should not overuse. In the near future, although schools will
be preferred
online mediums to teach students as it is convenient, appealing and interesting, they
must
be concerned
about their
negative
impacts and should take demerits into account.
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IELTS essay : Children in some parts of the world have less responsibility compared to children in the past. Some people think this as a positive change; however, others think of it as a negative change. What do you think? Give reasons for v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
422 words
7.5
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