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Write about the following topic: All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty? Use specific reason and example to explain to your answers. You should write at least 250 words. v.3

In current scenario, we observe that the affluent people getting more wealthy and on the other hand the needy persons are in lieu of money hence it creates an economical imbalance. This essay will discuss the causes to eradicate the poverty. The possible reasons are described in following paragraphs: - There are various problems leads to adverse affect on our economy. To commence with, all categories of people required for smooth functioning. This is because a cluster of different classes of people require for daily functioning our lives. For instances, without lower middle class individuals like fruits vendors, domestic helpers and drivers none of the upper middle class society will able to survive in long run. In addition to that, poor people have to suffer a lot. Due to absence of education, they become more exploit as they are unaware of their fundamental rights. Therefore, they are generally underpaid and have to work extensively without other benefits. To supersede this issue Government has to take some important measures. On the other hand, tax structure need to determine as per income and wealth. Administrations impose a higher percentage of tax along with a mandatory obligation to do corporate social responsibility which help weaker section to flourish. Due to the fact, they are easily accessible to support their basic needs. Likewise, primary education is compulsory for weaker section of the society. Education is only the key factor which eliminates the gap between each other. Thus, with the higher level of education a poor class person also hold a top position in any organization. To conclude, to maintain equilibrium in the society presence of poor people’s is essential to support their livelihood, they face ill-treatment due to absence of literacy. To penetrate, tax structure should be levied in a manner so that they uplift them and of course basic education results in optimizing the bridge between the two section of the province.
In
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current
scenario, we observe that the affluent
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people
getting more wealthy and on the
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other
hand the needy persons are in lieu of money
hence
it creates an economical imbalance. This essay will discuss the causes to eradicate the poverty. The possible reasons are
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described
in following paragraphs: -

There are various problems leads to adverse
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affect
on our economy. To commence with, all categories of
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people
required for smooth functioning. This is
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because
a cluster of
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different
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classes
of
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people
require for daily functioning our
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lives
. For instances, without lower middle
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class
individuals like fruits vendors, domestic helpers and drivers none of the upper middle
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class
society
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will able
to survive in long run.
In addition
to that, poor
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people
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have to
suffer a lot. Due to absence of
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education
, they become more exploit as they are unaware of their fundamental rights.
Therefore
, they are
generally
underpaid and
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have to
work
extensively
without
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other
benefits.

To supersede this issue
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Government
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has to
take
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some
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important
measures. On the
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other
hand, tax structure need to determine as per income and wealth. Administrations impose a higher percentage of tax along with a mandatory obligation to do corporate social responsibility which
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help
weaker section to flourish. Due to the fact, they are
easily
accessible to support their basic needs.
Likewise
, primary
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education
is compulsory for weaker section of the society.
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Education
is
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only
the key factor which eliminates the gap between each
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other
.
Thus
, with the higher level of
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education
a poor
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class
person
also
hold a top position in any organization.

To conclude
, to maintain equilibrium in the society presence of poor
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people’s
is essential to support their livelihood, they face ill-treatment due to absence of literacy. To penetrate, tax structure should
be levied
in a manner
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so
that they uplift them and
of course
basic
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education
results in optimizing the bridge between the two section of the province.
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IELTS essay All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problem does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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