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Write about the following topic: All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty? Use specific reason and example to explain to your answers. You should write at least 250 words. v.2

Proverty is very common word heard in the developing countries. It is true that in many under developed countries, rich becoming even richer and poor have become more poor. This problem is comes due to lack of education, corruption in the system and with wide variety of problems to the society and it has negative impact on the development of any developing country. To solve these problems I thing, government should take necessary steps and implement laws to improve standard of poor people. Studies says, proverty and crime is correlated because poor people done crime to fullfill there basic needs. Furthermore children’s of poorer are not able to take higher education even they may have talented and good in study. As a result they are not hired for wealthy jobs. This means they lives their lives under proverty. Moreover public health is not good if people living im extreme provery. To solve these problems, government should need to do more work for minimizing the gap between poorer and richer. Firstly should provide provide financial support for people who are living under proverty. secondly government should have to stop privatization of education and health sector and improve quality of government education system hospital. Due to privatization of education and health people who lives under proverty they can not afford. To conclude, every single person of every contry has rights to get a education, good health and good life and I believe that education is a weapon for fight with proverty. Older says when a child of a house becomes educated then his house, his family, his parents, and his future generations, all their life changes forever
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common word heard in the
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developing countries
. It is true that in
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many
under
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developed countries
, rich becoming even richer and
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poor
have become more
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poor
. This
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problem
is
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comes
due to lack of
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education
, corruption in the system and with wide variety of
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problems
to the
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society and
it has
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negative
impact on the development of any
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developing country
. To solve these
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problems
I
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thing
,
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government
should take necessary steps and implement laws to
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improve
standard of
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poor
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people
.

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,
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proverty
and crime
is correlated
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because
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poor
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people
done crime to
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fullfill
there basic needs.
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Furthermore
children’s of poorer are not able to take higher
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education
even they may have talented and
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good
in study.
As a result
they are not hired for wealthy jobs. This means they
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lives
their
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lives
under
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proverty
.
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Moreover
public
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health
is not
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good
if
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people
living
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im
extreme
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provery
.

To solve these
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problems
,
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government
should need to do more work for minimizing the gap between poorer and richer.
Firstly
should
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provide provide
financial support for
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people
who are living under
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proverty
.
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secondly
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government
should
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have to
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stop
privatization of
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education
and
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health
sector and
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improve
quality of
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government
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education
system hospital. Due to privatization of
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education
and
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health
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people
who
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lives
under
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proverty
they can not afford.

To conclude
, every single person of every
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contry
has rights to
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get
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a
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education
,
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good
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health
and
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good
life and I believe that
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education
is a weapon for fight with
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proverty
. Older says when a child of a
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house
becomes educated then his
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house
, his family, his parents, and his future generations, all their life
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changes
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forever
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IELTS essay All over the world, the rich becoming richer and the poor becoming poorer. what problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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