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scientific research should be conducted under the control of government v.1

scientific research should be conducted under the control of government v. 1
Nowadays, science and technology play an indispensable role in human life. However, a question has arisen that whether scientific research should be conducted under the control of the authorities rather than private companies or not. Personally, I completely agree with this idea due to several reasons, which will be discussed in this essay. It is undeniable that the main aim of scientific research carried out by government organizations is to benefit the community. These studies are usually non-profit and involved in such important matters as medicine, environment and education, … Let me adduce a concrete proof, Vietnam Military Medical Academy, to detect coronavirus disease, did try and succeed in inventing test kits, which has given many countries a huge advantage. It is obvious that these researches not only improve the quality of people’s lives, but also help boost the development of the country. In addition, as the authorities controlled research activities, there will be the utmost security and more reliable findings. Also, the risk of intentional information misleading, which can have a negative impact on the national economy and politics, can be minimized. Hence, it is necessary that the responsibility for managing research should be taken by government. Nevertheless, it is argued that private firms should be allowed to implement research so that the authorities will not be under the pressure from the lack of scientists and time. However, I believe that the benefits companies bring with cannot make up for the risks and disadvantages. When private companies undertake studies, they usually try to complete them in such a short time to protect their interest. As a result, the accuracy of the findings cannot be ensured. Furthermore, although companies are given right to do research in science, we cannot see to it that their activities are always under control and not related to illegal experiments such as nuclear weapons. In conclusion, the government should be the controller of scientific research.
Nowadays, science and technology play an indispensable role in human life.
However
, a question has arisen that whether scientific
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research
should
be conducted
under the control of the authorities
rather
than private
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companies
or not.
Personally
, I completely
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agree
with this
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idea
due to several reasons, which will
be discussed
in this essay.

It is undeniable that the main aim of scientific
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research
carried out by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
organizations is to benefit the community. These studies are
usually
non-profit and involved in such
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important
matters as medicine, environment and education, …
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Let
me adduce a concrete proof, Vietnam Military Medical Academy, to detect coronavirus disease, did
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try and
succeed in inventing
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test
kits, which has
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given
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many
countries a huge advantage. It is obvious that these
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researches
not
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only
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improve
the quality of
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people
’s
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lives
,
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but
also
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help
boost the development of the country.
In addition
, as the authorities controlled
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research
activities, there will be the utmost security and more reliable findings.
Also
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of intentional information misleading, which can have a
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negative
impact on the national economy and politics, can
be minimized
.
Hence
, it is necessary that the responsibility for managing
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research
should
be taken
by
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government
.

Nevertheless
, it
is argued
that private firms should be
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allowed
to implement
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research
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so
that the authorities will not be under the pressure from the lack of scientists and time.
However
, I believe that the benefits
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companies
bring with cannot
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make
up for the
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risks
and disadvantages. When private
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companies
undertake studies, they
usually
try to complete them in such a short time to protect their interest.
As a result
, the accuracy of the findings cannot
be ensured
.
Furthermore
, although
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companies
are
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given
right to do
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research
in science, we cannot
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see
to it that their activities are always under control and not related to illegal experiments such as nuclear weapons.

In conclusion
, the
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government
should be the controller of scientific
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research
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay scientific research should be conducted under the control of government v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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