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Write about the following topic. Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.23

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 23
Online courses are indeed becoming a common feature of university education. Although there are some drawbacks to Internet-based learning, I would argue that there are far more benefits. The main drawback of the trend towards online university courses is that there is less direct interaction. Students may not have the opportunity to engage face-to-face with their teachers, and will instead have to rely on written forms of communication. Similarly, students who study online do not come into direct contact with each other, and this could harm peer support, discussion and exchange of ideas. For example, whereas students in traditional courses can attend seminars and even discuss their subjects over coffee after lessons, online learners are restricted to chatting through website forum areas. These learners may also lack the motivation and the element of competition that face-to-face group work brings. Despite the negatives mentioned above, I believe that online university courses are a positive development for various reasons. Firstly, they allow learners to study flexibly, meaning that they can work whenever and wherever is convenient, and they can cover the material at their own pace. Secondly, the cost of a university education can be greatly reduced, while revenues for institutions may increase as more students can be taught. Finally, online learning offers open access to anybody willing to study, regardless of age, location, ability, and background. For example, my uncle, who is 65 years old, has recently enrolled in an online MBA course in a different country, which would have been impossible in the days before Internet-based education. In conclusion, while I recognize the possible disadvantages of online learning, I consider it to be a positive development overall.
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education. Although there are
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drawbacks to Internet-based learning, I would argue that there are far more benefits.

The main drawback of the trend towards
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online
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university
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courses
is that there is less direct interaction.
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Students
may not have the opportunity to engage face-to-face with their teachers, and will
instead
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have to
rely on written forms of communication.
Similarly
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students
who study
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online
do not
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come
into direct contact with each other, and this could harm peer support, discussion and exchange of
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ideas
.
For example
, whereas
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students
in traditional
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courses
can attend seminars and even discuss their subjects over coffee after lessons,
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online
learners
are restricted
to chatting through website forum areas. These learners may
also
lack the motivation and the element of competition that face-to-face group work brings.

Despite the negatives mentioned above, I believe that
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online
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university
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courses
are a
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positive
development for various reasons.
Firstly
, they
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allow
learners to study
flexibly
, meaning that they can work whenever and wherever is convenient, and they can cover the material at their
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own
pace.
Secondly
, the cost of a
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university
education can be
greatly
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reduced
, while revenues for institutions may increase as more
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students
can
be taught
.
Finally
,
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online
learning offers open access to anybody willing to study, regardless of age, location, ability, and background.
For example
, my uncle, who is 65 years
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old
, has recently enrolled in an
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online
MBA
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course
in a
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different
country, which would have been impossible in the days
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before
Internet-based education.

In conclusion
, while I recognize the possible disadvantages of
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online
learning, I consider it to be a
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positive
development
overall
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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