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When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. v. 3
People have different views regarding the importance of a building’s function in comparison to its exterior appearance. In my opinion, I agree with the idea that a construction’s purpose should be more highly valued than the appearance for a number of reasons. On the one hand, it cannot be denied that a magnificent looking structure can bring a wide range of benefits that should be taken into consideration. Firstly, it can remarkably raise the value of a building, especially a commercial or shopping centre, as it looks more attractive, professional and high-class. The more customers are attracted to the building, the more profit it can potentially generate, which can benefit the building’s owners enormously. Secondly, a building with an aesthetic design can contribute a lot to the appearance of a city, and may make it become one of the most distinguishing places on the map. A lot of cities nowadays, which are well-known for their architectural beauty have become popular destinations for tourists. On the other hand, the purpose of a building, in my opinion, is the key consideration when designing it. There are a variety of different building types such as office buildings, commercial buildings, shopping centres, hospitals and schools. Each one of these has its own purpose and a particular interior design to serve those purposes. Therefore, only by focusing on the functionality of a design first, can we bring out the best use of a construction. In addition, people use a particular place because of what it offers inside, not merely because of what it looks like on the outside. For example, if a company intends to erect a new office building, they will tend to choose the design based on the inner working spaces to enhance the operation of the staff and the enterprise. In conclusion, while the exterior of a building is an important factor, I believe its function should receive greater attention.
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People
have
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different
views regarding the importance of a
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building’s
function
in comparison
to its exterior appearance. In my opinion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that a construction’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
purpose
should be more
highly
valued than the appearance for a number of reasons.

On the one hand, it cannot
be denied
that a magnificent looking structure can bring a wide range of benefits that should
be taken
into consideration.
Firstly
, it can
remarkably
raise the value of a
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building
,
especially
a commercial or shopping
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centre
, as it looks more attractive, professional and high-
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class
. The more customers
are attracted
to the
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building
, the more profit it can
potentially
generate, which can benefit the
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building’s
owners
enormously
.
Secondly
, a
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building
with an aesthetic
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design
can contribute a lot to the appearance of a city, and may
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make
it become one of the most distinguishing places on the map.
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A lot of
cities nowadays, which are well-known for their architectural beauty have become popular destinations for tourists.

On the other hand
, the
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purpose
of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
, in my opinion, is the key consideration when designing it. There are a variety of
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different
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building
types such as office
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buildings
, commercial
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buildings
, shopping
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centres
, hospitals and schools. Each one of these has its
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own
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purpose
and a particular interior
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design
to serve those
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purposes
.
Therefore
,
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only
by focusing on the functionality of a
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design
first
, can we bring out the best
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use
of a construction.
In addition
,
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people
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use
a particular place
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because
of what it
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offers
inside, not
merely
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because
of what it looks like on the outside.
For example
, if a
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company
intends to erect a new office
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building
, they will tend to choose the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
design
based on the inner working spaces to enhance the operation of the
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staff
and the enterprise.

In conclusion
, while the exterior of a
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building
is an
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important
factor, I believe its function should receive greater attention.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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