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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 3
In this modern world, online education is a comparatively new trend and its being used by most of the universities to teach their courses. While some negative aspects are present in the development which could not be neglected, but the advantages are more than that which outweighed the demerits. To begin with, many universities in developed countries offering online courses, as they started this thing by doing proper research. These kind of research proved that online courses are very helpful for students as well as for teachers. Online courses are designed by various experienced teachers and hence they maintain a rigid quality. The internet facility helps people to enroll in a course without considering time and distance. This kind of learning helps many housewives and old people to complete their education without having it effect on their personal life's. For instance, as many as twenty five thousand housewives complete their education or any kind of diploma in one year. The traditional classroom method are not essential for them as they are very busy in their own work. Moreover, the internet based courses are easier to follow and some can retake the missing lesson over and over again. In contrary, the downside of this trend is the lack of supervision by the teacher. The face to face interaction is very much needed to clear doubts, which cannot be cleared in long distance learning. Online courses offered by prestigious university are often very expensive to afford by the poor people. Teacher guidance and mutual support are needed to boost up the confidence of students, and its play a vital role in the student success. To conclude, technological advancement in education, especially to the online education, is reducing the gap between the student and studies to make an unemployed person's world.
In this modern world,
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education
is a
comparatively
new trend and its being
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used
by most of the universities to teach their
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courses
. While
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some
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negative
aspects are present in the development which could not
be neglected
,
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but
the advantages are more than that which outweighed the demerits.

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begin
with,
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many
universities in
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developed countries
offering
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online
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courses
, as they
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started
this thing by doing proper research.
Did you mean "this kind" or "These kinds"?
These kind
of research proved that
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online
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courses
are
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very
helpful for
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students
as well
as for
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teachers
.
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Online
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courses
are designed
by various experienced
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teachers
and
hence
they maintain a rigid quality. The internet facility
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helps
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people
to enroll in a
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course
without considering time and distance. This kind of learning
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helps
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many
housewives and
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old
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people
to complete their
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education
without having it effect on their personal life's.
For instance
, as
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many
as
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twenty five
thousand housewives complete their
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education
or any kind of diploma in one year. The traditional classroom method are not essential for them as they are
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very
busy in their
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own
work.
Moreover
, the internet based
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courses
are easier to follow and
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some
can retake the missing lesson over and over again.

In contrary, the downside of this trend is the lack of supervision by the
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teacher
. The face to face interaction is
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very
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much needed
to
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clear
doubts, which cannot
be cleared
in long distance learning.
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Online
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courses
offered by prestigious university are
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often
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very
expensive to afford by the poor
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people
.
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Teacher
guidance and mutual support
are needed
to boost up the confidence of
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students
, and its play a vital role in the
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student
success.

To conclude
, technological advancement in
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education
,
especially
to the
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online
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education
, is reducing the gap between the
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student
and studies to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an unemployed person's world.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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