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Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter, explain the reason for the noise apologise for the noise describe what action you will take v.1

Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter, explain the reason for the noise apologise for the noise describe what action you will take v. 1
It is often argued that numbers of boys and girls admitted to every university subject must be the same. I strongly disagree with this statement that accepting the equal proportions of males and females in every subject. Firstly, every student has their own favourite subject and free to choose what they want to study in a university. When they were in high school, each of them must have thought what are they going to study based on what they are interested in. There are many subjects that are suitable to each gender. For example, fashion design and nurse are more attracted to girls compare to boys. Students cannot be forced just to fill the course that is less demand in male or female students. Secondly, they must see the applicants from their score and other qualifications. It is extremely unfair if they see from the applicants from the gender. For example, when a male student has a higher grade on his qualifications, but the number of male students outweighs the number of girl students and he is not allowed to join the course. It is not fair if they force them whenever the number of each gender has reached the limit and do not allow them who have higher grade to join the course. In conclusion, the number of students admitted must base on their qualifications and it is completely unfair if they were selected by gender. Each student has their own choice to choose what they like and passion
It is
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often
argued that
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numbers
of boys and girls admitted to every university subject
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must
be the same. I
strongly
disagree with this statement that accepting the equal proportions of
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males
and females in every subject.

Firstly
, every
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student
has their
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own
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
subject and free to choose what they want to study in a university. When they were in high school, each of them
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must
have
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thought
what are they going to study based on what they
are interested
in. There are
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many
subjects that are suitable to each gender.
For example
, fashion design and nurse are more attracted to girls compare to boys.
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Students
cannot
be forced
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just
to fill the course
that is
less demand in male or female students.

Secondly
, they
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must
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see
the applicants from their score and other qualifications. It is
extremely
unfair if they
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see
from the applicants from the gender.
For example
, when a male
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student
has a higher grade on his qualifications,
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but
the
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number
of male
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students
outweighs the
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number
of girl
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
students and
he is not
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allowed
to
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join
the course. It is not
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fair
if they force them whenever the
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number
of each gender has reached the limit and do not
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allow
them who have higher grade to
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join
the course.

In conclusion
, the
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number
of
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students
admitted
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must
base on their qualifications and it is completely unfair if they
were selected
by gender. Each
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student
has
'Each', 'every', 'either' and 'neither' are used with singular and thus take a singular pronoun: "his", "her", "his or her", "its"
their
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own
choice to choose what they like and
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
passion
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter, explain the reason for the noise apologise for the noise describe what action you will take v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
249 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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