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Write a letter to your friend who is visiting a city that you are familiar with 1 Describe to him the place orth visiting 2 Eating Options 3 Transport Options v.1

Write a letter to your friend who is visiting a city that you are familiar with 1 Describe to him the place orth visiting 2 Eating Options 3 Transport Options v. 1
Media, being one of the main channels to bring the up-to-date updates to the doors of the society has evolved at a greater course over the decades. There have been various debates about the contents delivered to the viewers, where some believe that the media is exclusively focusing on negative matters over the positive growths. In my opinion, though this might have an adverse effect on people’s mind, but it alerts about the environs. To begin with, news reporters are not only responsible to convey positive matters to the society, but also news related to crime and tragedies. Although, delivering negative matters may raise a concern in people’s mind, but it will also alert the public. Subsequently, this will create awareness amongst the individuals and on-going issues in the surroundings. For example, news channels in India broadcast various shows associated with criminal offences and their consequences. Initially, these shows showed low viewers which gradually raised over a year. In addition to this, problematic news grabs the attention of the viewer and remind them often, wherein, good matters tend to leave a short spot on people’s minds. A study about the television viewer ship in China, revealed that the target audience, who were exposed to the criminal contents thrice a day, took better precautions to protect themselves from such crimes as compared to those that were exposed only once. To summarize, though these contents are harmful to the individual and to the society, but has a greater influence in their life’s. In current scenario where crime rates and disasters are high, media can play a vital role in exposing such threats to the public rather than just focusing on positive development
Media, being one of the main channels to bring the up-to-date updates to the doors of the society has evolved at a greater course over the decades. There have been various debates about the contents delivered to the
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viewers
, where
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some
believe that the media is exclusively focusing on
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negative
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matters
over the
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positive
growths. In my opinion, though this might have an adverse effect on
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people
’s mind,
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but
it alerts about the environs.

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reporters are not
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only
responsible to convey
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positive
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matters
to the society,
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but
also
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news
related to crime and tragedies. Although, delivering
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negative
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matters
may raise a concern in
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people
’s mind,
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but
it will
also
alert the public.
Subsequently
, this will create awareness amongst the individuals and
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on-going
issues in the surroundings.
For example
,
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news
channels in India broadcast various
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shows
associated with criminal
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offences
and their consequences.
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, these
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shows
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showed
low
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viewers
which
gradually
raised over a year.

In addition
to this, problematic
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news
grabs the attention of the
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viewer
and remind them
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often
, wherein,
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good
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matters
tend to
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leave
a short spot on
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people
’s minds. A study about the television
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viewer
ship in China, revealed that the target audience, who
were exposed
to the criminal contents thrice a day, took better precautions to protect themselves from such crimes as compared to those that
were exposed
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only
once.

To summarize
, though these contents are harmful to the individual and to the society,
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but
has a greater influence in their life’s. In
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current
scenario where crime rates and disasters are high, media can play a vital role in exposing such threats to the public
rather
than
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just
focusing on
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positive
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development
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend who is visiting a city that you are familiar with 1 Describe to him the place orth visiting 2 Eating Options 3 Transport Options v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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