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Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to your family party. In your letter– Explain why you are organizing the party. – Describe what you are planning to do. – Say how important it is to have your friend at the party. v.1

Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to your family party. In your letter– Explain why you are organizing the party. – Describe what you are planning to do. – Say how important it is to have your friend at the party. v. 1
It is undeniable that health care is one of the crucial sectors for government to manage and many advocates the view that it should be available to all at no cost; however, few think that authority may fail to provide best medical services. I would argue that receiving proper medical care is the fundamental right of every individual, hence it should be free. The main reason why I support free medical service is, everyone in the society is not capable of taking good care of themselves because of their economical background. As a result, several times people ignore their illnesses, eventually this negligence may invite serious concerns. If authorities make this service free then everyone in society will be aware of their health conditions and consequently can contribute to build a strong and robust nation. Secondly, ministry collects budgets from taxations, which are paid by citizens. Therefore, it is their duty to provide basic necessities at no charge. Moreover, usually research institutes are owned and controlled by ministry authorities hence they can ask to discover innovative and advanced medical equipments and make them available to society at subsidized rates. This will result into a happy and healthy country. On the other hand, those who agree with the latter view often think that there are several hurdles such as corruption, which might not be restricted public to gain access to cost less facilities. Evidently, they opine that authority should take responsibility and aim at educational and cultural sectors by investing that amount. To conclude, although few urge government to put money in education and culture to develop them, I absolutely agree that from above stated arguments government should provide health care at free of cost.
It is undeniable that health
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care
is one of the crucial sectors for
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government
to manage and
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many
advocates the view that it should be available to all at no cost;
however
, few
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think
that
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authority
may fail to
A determiner is probably missing here: "provide the best".
provide best
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medical
services. I would argue that receiving proper
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medical
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care
is the fundamental right of every individual,
hence
it should be free.

The main reason why I support free
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medical
service is, everyone in the society is not capable of taking
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good
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care
of themselves
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because
of their economical background.
As a result
, several times
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people
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ignore
their illnesses,
eventually
this negligence may invite serious concerns. If
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authorities
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make
this service free then everyone in society will be aware of their health conditions and
consequently
can contribute to build a strong and robust nation.

Secondly
, ministry collects budgets from
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taxations
, which
are paid
by citizens.
Therefore
, it is their duty to provide
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
at no charge.
Moreover
,
usually
research institutes are
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owned
and controlled by ministry
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authorities
hence
they can ask to discover innovative and advanced
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medical
equipments and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them available to society at subsidized rates. This will result into a happy and healthy country.

On the other hand
, those who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the latter view
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that there are several hurdles such as corruption, which might not
be restricted
public to gain access to cost
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun facilities is countable.
less
facilities.
Evidently
, they opine that
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authority
should take responsibility and aim at educational and cultural sectors by investing that amount.

To conclude
, although few urge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to put money in education and culture to develop them, I
absolutely
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agree
that from above stated
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "arguments'" or "argument's"?
arguments
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government
should provide health
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care
at free of cost.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to your family party. In your letter– Explain why you are organizing the party. – Describe what you are planning to do. – Say how important it is to have your friend at the party. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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