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the bar charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing coutries and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990 v.1

the bar charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing coutries and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990 v. 1
Ever since the introduction of the Internet, people are drawn to it because of the incredibly large stock of information available. Self-learning via websites has also been encouraged and proved effective, however, among utterly diligent students. Now, in the middle of the campaign against the contagious flu known as Covid-19, most of us who are pursuing an academic goal have the chance to experience this way of learning on a more regular basis as well as to give a general assessment. Firstly, what are the good sides, about online courses? As mentioned, they are compulsory at this period of time when the idea of gathering together in one place must be abandoned. With the aid of specially-designed apps once used in the workplace for meeting, we’re able to keep up with our curriculum. Classes are allowed to operate as they used to with either fixed or reasonably flexible schedule for a great variety of subjects. Moreover, we may record the lessons for further revision and have quick notes by taking photos, which certainly does not slow down the pace of teaching and learning for the others. Next, teachers tend to be pleased about students’ being better prepared before lesson time because they may send the materials into their chat groups every now and then. Finally, in spite of its normal working, the most dramatic change is that each student gains their own space in order to obtain the knowledge through their own unique learning styles, especially when it comes to logical thinking subjects such as physics, Maths, etc. Fairly judging, this is quite a good opportunity for them to have some training of necessary skills to get through in college life, where lecturers and professors’ presence would make minor control over their studying process. On the other hand, being heavily dependent on the offer of the Internet results in inconveniences. Most importantly, once the connection is poor, we are likely to have the classes cancelled, which is pretty time-consuming and even annoying, as different people will not be approved with the same alternative. Secondly, however hard the students and teachers may try to be interactive with each other, they might be distracted by things going around the house and news and messages cropping up in the social media. Thirdly, their workloads are under little or no control, let alone the fact of whether they do it themselves or just simply share with their classmates. Last but not least, children who study too much online face the state of anxiety owing to the remarkable number of hours spent in front of the phone or computer screen. Therefore, their health is another major concern in the long run. Overall, I believe that in this day and age, holding on to those traditional methods of transferring lessons is not enough. Perhaps there may be more advantages we may make out of having e-courses when students, maybe along with appropriate parental guidance, are thoroughly aware of their responsibility and show their discipline in the work provided.
Ever since the introduction of the Internet,
people
are drawn
to it
because
of the
incredibly
large stock of information available. Self-learning via websites has
also
been encouraged
and proved effective,
however
, among
utterly
diligent
students
.
Now
, in the middle of the campaign against the contagious flu known as Covid-19, most of us who are pursuing an academic goal have the chance to experience this way of learning on a more regular basis
as well
as to give a general assessment.

Firstly
, what are the
good
sides, about online courses? As mentioned, they are compulsory at this period of time when the
idea
of gathering together in one place
must
be abandoned
. With the aid of
specially
-designed apps once
used
in the workplace for meeting, we’re able to
keep
up with our curriculum. Classes are
allowed
to operate as they
used
to with either
fixed
or
reasonably
flexible schedule for a great variety of subjects.
Moreover
, we may record the lessons for
further
revision and have quick notes by taking photos, which
certainly
does not slow down the pace of teaching and learning for the others.
Next
, teachers tend to be
pleased
about
students’
being better prepared
before
lesson time
because
they may
send
the materials into their chat groups every
now
and then.
Finally
,
in spite of
its normal working, the most dramatic
change
is that each
student
gains their
own
space in order to obtain the knowledge through their
own
unique learning styles,
especially
when it
comes
to logical thinking subjects such as physics,
Maths
, etc.
Fairly
judging, this is quite a
good
opportunity for them to have
some
training of necessary
skills
to
get
through in college life, where lecturers and professors’ presence would
make
minor control over their studying process.

On the other hand
, being
heavily
dependent on the offer of the Internet results in inconveniences. Most
importantly
, once the connection is poor, we are likely to have the classes cancelled, which is pretty time-consuming and even annoying, as
different
people
will not
be approved
with the same alternative.
Secondly
,
however
hard
the
students
and teachers may try to be interactive with each other, they might
be distracted
by things going around the
house
and news and messages cropping up in the social media.
Thirdly
, their workloads are under
little
or no control,
let
alone the fact of whether they do it themselves or
just
simply
share with their classmates. Last
but
not least, children who study too much online face the state of anxiety owing to the remarkable number of hours spent in front of the phone or computer screen.
Therefore
, their health is another major concern in the long run.

Overall
, I believe that in this day and age, holding on to those traditional methods of transferring lessons is not
enough
. Perhaps there may be more advantages we may
make
out of having e-courses when
students
, maybe along with appropriate parental guidance, are
thoroughly
aware of their responsibility and
show
their discipline in the work provided.
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IELTS essay the bar charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing coutries and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
502 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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