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Write a letter to your friend from whom you borrowed something that accidentally broke. Please say– Remind him/her, what have you borrowed– Explain what happened– What you will do about it v.1

Write a letter to your friend from whom you borrowed something that accidentally broke. Please say– Remind him/her, what have you borrowed– Explain what happened– What you will do about it v. 1
Owing to the advancements in the internet, most of the e-commerce sites these days provide a facility for the users to share their feedback about the products they have purchased. Although this can sometimes misguide the consumers, in my perspective, it is beneficial as it helps the buyers to check the credibility of the product. Admittedly, the facility of the online reviewing system is misused by many producers. The reason for this is, in order to increase the sales of the items they make use of fake positive reviews and opinions which many times misguide the consumers. As most of the end-users prefer to buy the goods with more rating and positive feedback. To exemplify, a start-up mobile company 'Juno' fooled thousands of people throughout India with the help of misleading and false reviews of their non-smart and low-quality mobile phones. Nevertheless, despite the aforementioned drawback, sharing of opinions on the goods purchased online is advantageous as it can provide a better insight into the product quality. With this platform people who have already bought the item can openly share their good or bad experience of using that product. Consequently, this will not only help the other buyers to analyse the effectiveness of the item, but also make the selection of the product easy for them. For instance, in the global ranking of the end-user facilities provided by the e-commerce sites, Amazon's rating facility on each good and service is ranked first, as it facilitates the users to buy the best item. In conclusion, while there are some instances where an unauthorized feedback system can be misleading, in my opinion, the overall review system is a benefit for the end-users as it allows them to analyse the quality of goods.
Owing to the advancements
The usual collocation for technology is "on," not "in." It is better to say this: "on the internet".
in the internet
, most of the e-commerce sites these days provide a facility for the users to share their feedback about the
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products
they have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
. Although this can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
misguide the consumers, in my perspective, it is beneficial as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the buyers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
the credibility of the product.

Admittedly
, the facility of the online reviewing system
is misused
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
producers.
The reason for this is
, in order to increase the sales of the items they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of fake
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positive
reviews and opinions which
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
times misguide the consumers. As most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
-users prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
with more rating and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
feedback. To exemplify, a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
-up mobile
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
'Juno' fooled thousands of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
throughout India with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of misleading and false reviews of their non-smart and low-quality mobile phones.

Nevertheless
, despite the aforementioned drawback, sharing of opinions on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
online is advantageous as it can provide a better insight into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
quality. With this platform
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who have already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
the item can
openly
share their
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good
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
experience of using that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
.
Consequently
, this will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the other buyers to
Possible spelling mistake. 'analyse' is British English.
analyse
the effectiveness of the item,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the selection of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
easy for them.
For instance
, in the global ranking of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
-user facilities provided by the e-commerce sites, Amazon's rating facility on each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
and service
is ranked
first
, as it facilitates the users to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the best item.

In conclusion
, while there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
instances where an unauthorized feedback system can be misleading, in my opinion, the
overall
review system is a benefit for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
-users as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
them to
Possible spelling mistake. 'analyse' is British English.
analyse
the quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend from whom you borrowed something that accidentally broke. Please say– Remind him/her, what have you borrowed– Explain what happened– What you will do about it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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