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While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter explain- what happened- apologize for the accident- tell your friend how v.1

While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter explain- what happened- apologize for the accident- tell your friend how v. 1
These days, moving out to another place for pursuing higher education has become a common trend. It poses a dilemma before the majority of us. In my opinion the latter is far more favourable as it opens one up to a wide range of prospects. This essay will talk about the reasons to support my agreement. There are innumerable cases wherein people from rural areas with simple personalities have been moulded into dynamic thinkers and problem solvers. There have been many people, including various famous personalities who gained sophistication. This genuinely proves how a overseas students living away from home have to transform himself. Keeping in mind situations when no one else is around to offer direct, unconditional help as parents do. In addition, when students need to spread their wings to soar in the sky of successes and failures, they have to go out and get their own practical experiences. They need to understand the world for themselves while managing their limited finances. In fact, this first-hand experience teaches them about tackling different situations and grappling with all sorts of challenges with dexterity. Consequently, this falsifies the apprehensions and hypothetical worries of their parents about them. As a matter of fact, it is feasible if they get an opportunity to live on their own away from the patronizing home atmosphere. In a nutshell, students living with parents owing to lack of finances may be, or any other reason whatsoever, might not get such an opportunity. But in such cases, they always have other ways to achieve a wholesome personality development. To sum up, it is highly necessary to stay away from one’s home during the course of tertiary school, as of course, it is the base for their future, especially, professional life.
These days, moving out to another place for pursuing higher education has become a common trend. It poses a dilemma
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before
the majority of us. In my opinion the latter is far more
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favourable
as it opens one up to a wide range of prospects. This essay will talk about the reasons to support my agreement.

There are innumerable cases wherein
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people
from rural areas with simple personalities have been
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moulded
into dynamic thinkers and problem solvers. There have been
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many
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people
, including various
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famous
personalities who gained sophistication. This
genuinely
proves how
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a
overseas students living away from home
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have to
transform himself. Keeping in mind situations when no one else is around to offer direct, unconditional
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help
as parents do.

In addition
, when students need to spread their wings to soar in the sky of successes and failures, they
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have to
go out and
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get
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
practical experiences. They need to understand the world for themselves while managing their limited finances. In fact, this
first
-hand experience teaches them about tackling
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
situations and grappling with all sorts of challenges with dexterity.
Consequently
, this falsifies the apprehensions and hypothetical worries of their parents about them. As a matter of fact, it is feasible if they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
an opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
away from the patronizing home atmosphere.

In a nutshell, students living with parents owing to lack of finances may be, or any other reason whatsoever, might not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
such an opportunity.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
in such cases, they always have other ways to achieve a wholesome personality development. To sum up, it is
highly
necessary to stay away from one’s home during the course of tertiary school, as
of course
, it is the base for their future,
especially
, professional life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter explain- what happened- apologize for the accident- tell your friend how v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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