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Write a letter to your friend. You have borrowed something from your friend, and it got damaged. 1. Apologise to the damage2. Explain what happened3. How you are going to fix the issue. v.5

Write a letter to your friend. You have borrowed something from your friend, and it got damaged. 1. Apologise to the damage2. Explain what happened3. How you are going to fix the issue. v. 5
It is said by some that car users ought to foot the costs of improving road systems due to the increasing number of cars, whereas others believe that this should be at the government’s expense. In my opinion, I agree with the latter. On the one hand, there is a cause for the payment of car users. They are responsible for road systems improvement due to their breaches of weight restrictions. Users sometimes carry oversize loads or exceed the maximum number of people in cars, which leads to serious road damage. Therefore, as a way to protect the systems, they have to be fined for their lack of awareness. For instance, car users in Vietnam must pay more than one million VND when exceeding acceptable weight limits, partly contributing to the development of transport infrastructures. Despite the above-mentioned argument, others and I contend that the government should take responsibility for the costs for several reasons. Firstly, investment in infrastructures takes a huge amount of money, which is far beyond the car users’ capability. Moreover, they have indirectly contributed to the enhancement by paying road taxes or fines, and part of national budgets comes from these payments. In addition, one of the government’s essential roles is to provide citizens with better living standards, including the improvement of road systems. Thus, since the growing quantity of cars can make them downgraded, the government should spend more on their structures maintenance. In conclusion, although the idea that car users are financially responsible for enhancing the systems sounds feasible, I support that the disbursement has to be made by the government.
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that
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car
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users
ought to foot the costs of improving
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road
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systems
due to the increasing number of
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cars
, whereas others believe that this should be at the
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government’s
expense. In my opinion, I
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agree
with the latter.

On the one hand, there is a cause for the payment of
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car
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users
. They are responsible for
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road
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systems
improvement due to their breaches of weight restrictions.
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Users
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sometimes
carry oversize loads or exceed the maximum number of
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people
in
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cars
, which leads to serious
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road
damage.
Therefore
, as a way to protect the
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systems
, they
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have to
be fined
for their lack of awareness.
For instance
,
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car
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users
in Vietnam
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must
pay more than one million VND when exceeding acceptable weight limits, partly contributing to the development of transport infrastructures.

Despite the above-mentioned argument, others and I contend that the
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government
should take responsibility for the costs for several reasons.
Firstly
, investment in infrastructures takes a huge amount of money, which is far beyond the
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car
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users’
capability.
Moreover
, they have
indirectly
contributed to the enhancement by paying
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road
taxes or fines, and part of national budgets
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comes
from these payments.
In addition
, one of the
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government’s
essential roles is to provide citizens with better living standards, including the improvement of
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road
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systems
.
Thus
, since the growing quantity of
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cars
can
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make
them downgraded, the
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government
should spend more on their structures maintenance.

In conclusion
, although the
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idea
that
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car
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users
are
financially
responsible for enhancing the
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systems
sounds feasible, I support that the disbursement
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has to
be made
by the
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government
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend. You have borrowed something from your friend, and it got damaged. 1. Apologise to the damage2. Explain what happened3. How you are going to fix the issue. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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