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TOPIC 1: Some people think that it is more effective for students in studying in groups, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

TOPIC 1: Some people think that it is more effective for students in studying in groups, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. 1
If people do not know about the problems in their country, how can they develop their living? Although receiving a positive news might be better than a negative one, this side leads individuals and society to improve themselves. This essay will describe why news reports should focus on problems and emergencies because of awareness of things around us and improvement of the problems. As the news spreads quickly and globally on the Internet, reporting an emergency make people aware of the current issues and save from the disaster, which is not usually happen. For example, news reports about the Hurricane that will come in 2 days, so people in that area can prepare themselves to emigrate to another safe place. Moreover, this will make people much more aware about our world likes global warming, which create a climate extreme, so people trend to use their own bag instead of plastic bag. Knowing the problems creates a developmental society as they know their weakness to solve. To be specific, reporting about a traffic jam that occur in some areas, according to an undeveloped transportation; therefore, the government will know the specific problem and solve it immediately. Furthermore, this kind of news make an opportunity for investor to invest in that area when economy grow, the country will also grow. In a nutshell, people should receive both viewpoints; however, reporting problems and emergencies make Individuals and society more awareness and improve themselves. Therefore, this will lead to a greater impact on development.
If
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people
do not know about the
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problems
in their country, how can they develop their living? Although receiving a
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positive
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news
might be better than a
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negative
one, this side leads individuals and society to
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improve
themselves. This essay will
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describe
why
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news
reports should focus on
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problems
and emergencies
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because
of awareness of things around us and improvement of the problems.

As the
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news
spreads
quickly
and globally on the Internet, reporting an emergency
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make
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people
aware of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
issues and save from the disaster, which is not
usually
happen.
For example
,
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news
reports about the Hurricane that will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
in 2 days,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
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people
in that area can prepare themselves to emigrate to another safe place.
Moreover
, this will
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make
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people
much more aware about our world likes global warming, which create a climate extreme,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
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people
trend to
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use
their
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own
bag
instead
of plastic bag.

Knowing the
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problems
creates a developmental society as they know their weakness to solve. To be specific, reporting about a traffic jam that occur in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
areas, according to an undeveloped transportation;
therefore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
will know the specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
and solve it immediately.
Furthermore
, this kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
an opportunity for investor to invest in that area when economy grow, the country will
also
grow.

In a nutshell,
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people
should receive both viewpoints;
however
, reporting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
and emergencies
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
Individuals and society more awareness and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
themselves.
Therefore
, this will lead to a greater impact on development.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay TOPIC 1: Some people think that it is more effective for students in studying in groups, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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