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Writing task 1 (a letter)You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say– What and when did you borrow? – What happened to it? Why? – What do you suggest to v.1

Writing task 1 (a letter)You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say– What and when did you borrow? – What happened to it? Why? – What do you suggest to v. 1
Physical fitness has gained huge importance in recent days. Masses of people argue that people get motivated towards being physically fit is by watching the Olympic Games and varied of world cups, while fraction of people urge to use other mediums to get involved in exercising. I strongly believe there are myriad of ways to stay healthy other than games coming on Television. To start, there are ample of areas which can boost the morale of people who wants to exercise in their regular life. To add, the health problems these days and the sitting jobs are the major issues that can be solved by understanding the importance of exercising, walking or Yoga. Having said that, getting involved in any of the sports activity can also help masses to gain good health. For example, in school, students are not actually ready for participating in any big championships, but exercising is a regular part to keep them mentally and physically strong. Hence, exercising can be a part of our mundane tasks just to stay fit and free from diseases or being obese. On the other hand, People have a huge preference for games like the Olympics or world cups. They aim to take part in such sports on a bigger level to do great heights in the big sports event. Moreover, these sports motivates them to exercise regularly to qualify in the world cups and championships. For instance, Mayanka, a great marathon player, is motivated to join the New York marathon in the upcoming years, so her basic motivation is the winner cup that she would carry on being the winner. She exercises daily with jogging and instruments in Gym to be physically fit. In such cases, motivation level is really high to reach the targets. Finally, exercise and physical fitness go hand in hand. Just by being motivated by sports events cannot merely help you to be fit. It needs strong determination along with a passion for somebody to stay healthy. Thus exercising, walking or yoga can help people to be strong and healthy.
Physical fitness has gained huge importance in recent days. Masses of
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people
argue that
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people
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get
motivated towards being
physically
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fit
is by watching the Olympic Games and varied of world
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cups
, while fraction of
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people
urge to
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use
other mediums to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in
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exercising
. I
strongly
believe there are myriad of ways to stay healthy other than games coming on Television.

To
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start
, there are ample of areas which can boost the morale of
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people
who wants to
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exercise
in their regular life. To
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add
, the health problems these days and the sitting jobs are the major issues that can
be solved
by understanding the importance of
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exercising
, walking or Yoga. Having said that, getting involved in any of the
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sports
activity can
also
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help
masses to gain
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good
health.
For example
, in school, students are not actually ready for participating in any
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big
championships,
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but
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exercising
is a regular part to
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keep
them mentally and
physically
strong.
Hence
,
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exercising
can be a part of our mundane tasks
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just
to stay
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fit
and free from diseases or being obese.

On the other hand
,
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People
have a huge preference for games like the Olympics or world
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cups
. They aim to
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take part
in such
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sports
on a bigger level to do great heights in the
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big
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sports
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
.
Moreover
, these
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sports
motivates them to
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exercise
regularly
to qualify in the world
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cups
and championships.
For instance
,
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Mayanka
, a great marathon player,
is motivated
to
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join
the New York marathon in the upcoming years,
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so
her basic motivation is the winner
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cup
that she would carry on being the winner. She
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exercises
daily with jogging and instruments in Gym to be
physically
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fit
. In such cases, motivation level is
really
high to reach the targets.

Finally
,
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exercise
and physical fitness go hand in hand.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Just
by
being motivated
by
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sports
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events
cannot
merely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fit
. It needs strong determination along with a passion for somebody to stay healthy.
Thus
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exercising
, walking or yoga can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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people
to be strong and healthy.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Writing task 1 (a letter)You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say– What and when did you borrow? – What happened to it? Why? – What do you suggest to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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