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Write a letter to a friend you have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. apologise for damaging the production. Explain what happened. . Say how are you doing to fix the issue v.1

Write a letter to a friend you have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. apologise for damaging the production. Explain what happened. . Say how are you doing to fix the issue v. 1
There is a global rising demand for solar power for domestic supply. Concerning this topic, I am going to illustrate both advantages and disadvantages of this new trend. The sun, a mighty potential resembles safety, hope, a better future and god's mercy upon his creation, it is the never-ending source of light and warmth and throughout history, and the humankind respected and even worshipped it. However, As an original part of being human we looked for a way to make a good use of the star, In the middle of the 20th century as our industrial revolution was peaking, a sustained source of energy was a must. Thus, we invented solar panels, making it possible to obtain electricity anywhere on Earth. Solar potential has a huge number of advantages, in Africa, for example, it is very hard to provide electricity supply because of the poor infrastructure of the continent, but fortunately, the extremely hot weather that involves long hours of sun exposure makes a perfect condition for using solar panels and batteries to establish a sustained clear type of energy that I am sure is appreciated in such harsh environment. On the other hand, humans are not ever fulfilled, their ambition and gravamen to reach the boundaries never dies, leads to ruining their achievements. In the Amazon region, for example, where water supplies are abundant and there are a great sunlight exposure hours (which makes a perfect condition for green to prevails) humans cut a considerable number of trees to establish solar capacity stations, putting the ecosystem in the Amazon region in great danger. In conclusion, solar potential is the hope to solve our energy shortage problem. Therefore, we must consider a positive way to implement this new factor in our supply chain, not forgetting our environment and the ecosystems, which supported us in our dark ages.
There is a global rising demand for
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solar
power for domestic
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supply
. Concerning this topic, I am going to illustrate both advantages and disadvantages of this new trend.

The sun, a mighty potential resembles safety, hope, a better future and god's mercy upon his creation, it is the never-ending source of light and warmth and throughout history, and the humankind respected and even
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worshipped
it.
However
, As an original part of being human we looked for a way to
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make
a
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good
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use
of the star, In the middle of the 20th century as our industrial revolution was peaking, a sustained source of energy was a
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must
.
Thus
, we invented
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solar
panels, making it possible to obtain electricity anywhere on Earth.

Solar potential has a huge number of advantages, in Africa,
for example
, it is
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very
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hard
to provide electricity
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supply
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because
of the poor infrastructure of the continent,
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but
fortunately
, the
extremely
hot weather that involves long hours of sun exposure
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makes
a perfect condition for using
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solar
panels and batteries to establish a sustained
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clear
type of energy that I am sure
is appreciated
in such harsh environment.

On the other hand
, humans are not ever fulfilled, their ambition and gravamen to reach the boundaries never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dies
, leads to ruining their achievements. In the Amazon region,
for example
, where water supplies are abundant and there are a great sunlight exposure hours (which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
a perfect condition for green to prevails) humans
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cut
a considerable number of trees to establish
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solar
capacity stations, putting the ecosystem in the Amazon region in great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
.

In conclusion
,
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solar
potential is the hope to solve our energy shortage problem.
Therefore
, we
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must
consider a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
way to implement this new factor in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
supply
chain, not forgetting our environment and the ecosystems, which supported us in our dark ages.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to a friend you have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. apologise for damaging the production. Explain what happened. . Say how are you doing to fix the issue v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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