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Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v.3

Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3
It is commonly believed by many that university education should target more on academic subjects, while some others believe that practical subjects should be given more preference at higher educational institutions. In this essay, I will examine both the views and provide my opinion. To begin with, academic subjects are essential for the background knowledge and cultural awareness. If these subjects got removed from the curriculum or given lower preference, then younger generation would lack their interest in those subjects. Moreover, professions such as journalism, archaeologist and professors require immense study about history and other academic subjects which could not be gained in a better way than higher education institutions. Also, there is a very famous saying that 'a nation will soon lose his existence, if its youth has forgotten its history'. Every youngster should remember the sacrifices of freedom fighters and their national culture, including food, language, dressing style. It could be plausible if universities give more preference to academic subjects. On the other side, In this competitive world, practical knowledge of the subjects had become a necessity. Most of the companies hire those students who have some practical studies. Also to mark one's place in this competent world, everyone has to earn extraordinary skills, thus having studied practical subjects such as engineering and mechanics is beneficial. In my opinion, universities should focus more on practical courses rather than theoretical courses. After all, every student pursue higher studies with a motive to grab a high-profile job and earn a decent salary which is easily possible if one has learned practical subjects. In conclusion, both academic studies and practical studies are an essential part of the higher studies syllabus hence both the courses have their own advantages. However, I feel that colleges should concentrate on practical studies as they offer better opportunities of job for students.
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, while
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some
others believe that
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practical
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subjects
should be
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given
more preference at higher educational institutions. In this essay, I will examine both the views and provide my opinion.

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begin
with,
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subjects
are essential for the background knowledge and cultural awareness. If these
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subjects
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removed from the curriculum or
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given
lower preference, then younger generation would lack their interest in those
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subjects
.
Moreover
, professions such as journalism, archaeologist and professors require immense
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study
about history and other
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academic
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subjects
which could not
be gained
in a better way than higher education institutions.
Also
, there is a
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very
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famous
saying that 'a nation will
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soon
lose his existence, if its youth has forgotten its history'. Every youngster should remember the sacrifices of freedom fighters and their national culture, including food, language, dressing style. It could be plausible if universities give more preference to
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academic
subjects.

On the other side, In this competitive world,
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practical
knowledge of the
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subjects
had become a necessity. Most of the
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companies
hire those students who have
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some
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to mark one's place in this competent world, everyone
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has to
earn extraordinary
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skills
,
thus
having studied
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practical
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subjects
such as engineering and mechanics is beneficial.

In my opinion, universities should focus more on
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practical
courses
rather
than theoretical courses.
After all
, every student pursue higher
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studies
with a motive to grab a high-profile job and earn a decent salary which is
easily
possible if one has learned
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practical
subjects.

In conclusion
, both
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academic
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studies
and
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practical
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studies
are an essential part of the higher
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studies
syllabus
hence
both the courses have their
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own
advantages.
However
, I feel that colleges should concentrate on
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practical
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studies
as they offer better opportunities of job for students.
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IELTS essay Some schools put the most advanced students in separate classes from their peers so they can study more challenging materials. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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