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Write a letter to your English-speaking friend telling him/her about a local event that is totake place in your town, which would be useful to her/him. In your letter- Mention the event- What are the activities involved- Mention the arrangements you would v.1

Write a letter to your English-speaking friend telling him/her about a local event that is totake place in your town, which would be useful to her/him. In your letter- Mention the event- What are the activities involved- Mention the arrangements you would v. 1
It has been observed that children are less active and gaining weight these days. The major reasons are lack of physical activity and change in eating preferences. The solutions to these problems are that the parents should develop eating healthy habits and proper sports We have seen that youngsters are now involved in spending their leisure time playing games on computers and mobile phones. With no outdoor sports or socializing with friends, they are becoming lazy day by day. Similarly, our youngsters have their own eating preferences. According to the health survey, it was reported that 90 % of the sampled population of teenagers preferred to eat fast food items in their meals. However, food experts suggest that excessive usage of inorganic food items and no physical activity slowdowns the metabolism system which results in gaining weight. Due to this reason, youth is getting fat and lazy nowadays. To counter these issues, prime responsibility lies with the parents. They should develop healthy eating habits and proper time management for sports activity. According to medical experts, they suggest that regular exercise keeps the human body fit and brain active. A sports person has a strong immune system as compared to a non sports person. Additionally, balanced diet is also essential to keep the human fit. Parents should consult nutritionist, as they suggest tips to reduce weight along with proper diet plan and fitness schedule. To conclude, in today’s world we have a change in preferences among the kids. Unhealthy food items and no physical activity to create many health related problems. The role of parents is essential to guide them to developing eating healthy items and proper timing to sports activities.
It has
been observed
that children are less active and gaining weight these days. The major reasons are lack of physical
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activity
and
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change
in
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eating
preferences. The solutions to these problems are that the
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parents
should develop
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eating
healthy habits and
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proper
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sports


We have
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seen
that youngsters are
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now
involved in spending their leisure time playing games on computers and mobile phones. With no outdoor
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sports
or socializing with friends, they are becoming lazy day by day.
Similarly
, our youngsters have their
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own
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eating
preferences. According to the health survey, it
was reported
that 90 % of the sampled population of
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teenagers
preferred to eat
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fast
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food
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items
in their meals.
However
,
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food
experts suggest that excessive usage of inorganic
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food
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items
and no physical
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activity
slowdowns the metabolism system which results in gaining weight. Due to this reason, youth is getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fat
and lazy nowadays.

To counter these issues, prime responsibility lies with the
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parents
. They should develop healthy
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eating
habits and
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proper
time management for
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sports
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activity
. According to medical experts, they suggest that regular exercise
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keeps
the human body fit and brain active. A
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sports
person has a strong immune system as compared to a non
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sports
person.
Additionally
, balanced diet is
also
essential to
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keep
the human fit.
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Parents
should consult nutritionist, as they suggest tips to
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reduce
weight along with
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proper
diet plan and fitness schedule.

To conclude
, in
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today
’s world we have a
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change
in preferences among the kids. Unhealthy
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food
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items
and no physical
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activity
to create
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many
health related problems. The role of
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parents
is essential to guide them to developing
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eating
healthy
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items
and
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proper
timing to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "sport".
sports
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activities
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to your English-speaking friend telling him/her about a local event that is totake place in your town, which would be useful to her/him. In your letter- Mention the event- What are the activities involved- Mention the arrangements you would v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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