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Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: – explain your situation– describe your problems– tell him/her when you think you can move inWrite at least 150 words. v.1

Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: – explain your situation– describe your problems– tell him/her when you think you can move in v. 1
Advertising is now ubiquitous, bombarding us 24/7 with marketing messages on our TVs, computers, phones and streets. While some feel that we benefit from this, others argue that advertising has a detrimental effect. In this essay, I will examine both views and explain why I feel that although it is a necessary evil, this industry has an overwhelmingly negative impact, not just financially and psychologically, but also environmentally. Certainly, some argue that consumers need advertising. They claim that the ads provide valuable insights that help people to make informed purchasing choices. Take mobile phones, for instance. When new technologies or models become available, the only way to find out about them is usually through advertising like event launches, TV ads and billboards. The same is true for other products such as cosmetics, cars, and household appliances. In other words, without ads, many feel that customers would be disadvantaged. Despite this, others, myself included, feel that the ad industry is harmful. Indeed, it is generally accepted that ads are driving mass consumerism and fuelling the throwaway culture of modern societies. If a new iPhone is launched, for instance, customers are pressured to simply discard their old device and upgrade. By targeting consumers relentlessly, particularly through new media like YouTube and Facebook, these companies entice people to buy more and more, including products they do not need at all. The results of this trend can include financial distress, loss of self-esteem and, most worryingly, massive environmental damage. In conclusion, to some extent, advertising does have a role to play in the economy and can provide useful information to the buying public. Nevertheless, these benefits are outweighed by the fact that it is also the driving force behind some of the most serious problems in our society.
Advertising is
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now
ubiquitous, bombarding us 24/7 with marketing messages on our TVs, computers, phones and streets. While
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some
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feel
that we benefit from this, others argue that advertising has a detrimental effect. In this essay, I will examine both views and
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explain
why I
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feel
that although it is a necessary evil, this industry has an
overwhelmingly
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negative
impact, not
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just
financially
and
psychologically
,
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but
also
environmentally
.

Certainly
,
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some
argue that consumers need advertising. They claim that the ads provide valuable insights that
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help
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people
to
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make
informed purchasing choices. Take mobile phones,
for instance
. When new technologies or models become available, the
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only
way to find out about them is
usually
through advertising like
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event
launches, TV ads and billboards. The same is true for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
products such as cosmetics, cars, and household appliances. In
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other
words, without ads,
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
that customers would
be disadvantaged
.

Despite this, others, myself included,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
that the ad industry is harmful.
Indeed
, it is
generally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
that ads are driving mass consumerism and fuelling the throwaway culture of modern societies. If a new iPhone
is launched
,
for instance
, customers
are pressured
to
simply
discard their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
device and upgrade. By targeting consumers
relentlessly
,
particularly
through new media like YouTube and Facebook, these
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companies
entice
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people
to
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buy
more and more, including products they do not need at all. The results of this trend can include financial distress, loss of self-esteem and, most
worryingly
, massive environmental damage.

In conclusion
, to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent, advertising does have a role to play in the economy and can provide useful information to the buying public.
Nevertheless
, these benefits
are outweighed
by the fact that it is
also
the driving force behind
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some
of the most serious problems in our society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: – explain your situation– describe your problems– tell him/her when you think you can move in v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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