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You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realised you had left your wallet there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - thank your friend for the holiday - explain that you left your wallet in their h v.2

You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realised you had left your wallet there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - thank your friend for the holiday - explain that you left your wallet in their h v. 2
The job market shrinks, enlarges and changes at a greater pace than ever. Therefore, people need to be capable of doing more than one type of job and adapt to new ways to earn a healthy salary. There are some reasons for this situation and solutions of how people can adjust to these changes. To start with, there can be no question at all that automation has made a profound change in traditional occupations, and many have vanished altogether. For example, and it is not the most recent, car production is now automated in its entirety, with the only human interaction being the technicians and control room staff watching over the machines. Further on, let's look at automated checkouts, and something else, the high street bank. Once banks were filled with front office staff, but now the number of people on front desk work has dropped dramatically. Conversely the number of back office has increased with the advent of more online services and products. So, to look at the matter in a positive light, solutions to an ever changing world. The most essential thing is for people to enhance their skills base, particularly in communications, writing ability and critical analysis. Since people will need to boost their adaptability and suitability to perform different kinds of tasks. Those who have a broader skill-sets will get more chances to continue developing and gain positions with better pay. In addition, paying more attention to technological progress and its opportunities may well hold the promise of a brighter future as people and not just technology make innovation their life's work. In conclusion, we cannot reject all the developments, what we must do is improve ourselves and by doing so, face these challenges, and become better.
The job market shrinks, enlarges and
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changes
at a greater pace than ever.
Therefore
,
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people
need to be capable of doing more than one type of job and adapt to new ways to earn a healthy salary. There are
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some
reasons for this situation and solutions of how
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people
can adjust to these
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changes
.

To
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start
with, there can be no question at all that automation has made a profound
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change
in traditional occupations, and
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many
have vanished altogether.
For example
, and it is not the most recent, car production is
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now
automated in its entirety, with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
human interaction being the technicians and control room staff watching over the machines.
Further
on,
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let
's look at automated checkouts, and something else, the high street bank. Once banks
were filled
with front office staff,
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but
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now
the number of
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people
on front desk work has dropped
dramatically
.
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Conversely
the number of back office has increased with the advent of more online services and products.

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So
, to look at the matter in a
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positive
light, solutions to an
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ever changing
world. The most essential thing is for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to enhance their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
base,
particularly
in communications, writing ability and critical analysis. Since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will need to boost their adaptability and suitability to perform
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kinds of tasks. Those who have a broader
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
-sets will
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get
more chances to continue developing and gain positions with better pay.
In addition
, paying more attention to technological progress and its opportunities may well hold the promise of a brighter future as
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people
and not
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just
technology
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make
innovation their life's work.

In conclusion
, we cannot reject all the developments, what we
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must
do is
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improve
ourselves and by doing
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so
, face these challenges, and become better.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realised you had left your wallet there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - thank your friend for the holiday - explain that you left your wallet in their h v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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