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Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem. v.3

Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem. v. 3
Traditionally, school is the only place where students can get their fundamental education. Education plays a vital role in our daily life; without education you can find yourself in illiterate world. When the child hit 4 years of age; the parents get him enrolled in school. School is the only place where everyone starts their primary education. Now days most of the children prefer to study in groups but also many people feel that some pupils want to study by self. This essay will discuss both aspects and draw my personal opinion. To begin with, This is understood that students spent their time in school with friends; it could be in classroom, playground and cafeteria. As the play games in school team so the same way they want to study with friends in a group. Everyone has different perspectives and perception; they can share their knowledge and idea about the lecture in the group so in the way students can study for exams and as well for group projects and as well as for group assignments. For instance, If the student get fail to attend the lecture or absent from the school so later on he or she can do the remaining study with school friends. On the other side of the arguments, some students prefer to study by oneself; they don't want to study within the group. Especially some pupils waste their time during the study in chatting and useless discussion with friends in group study. In addition, When they study alone, they can concentrate more then the group study. For example, In library majority of the people do their study in a quiet environment because they want to bring full attention on the topic. To sum up, It depends on the students either they want study in the groups or they want in isolation both have own advantages and disadvantages. Research has proved that those students are more intelligent who do their study in groups.
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,
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is the
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place where
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students
can
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get
their fundamental
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education
.
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Education
plays a vital role in our daily life; without
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education
you can find yourself in illiterate world. When the child hit 4 years of age; the parents
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get
him enrolled in
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school
.
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School
is the
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only
place where everyone
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starts
their primary
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education
.
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Now
days most of the children prefer to
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study
in
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groups
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but
also
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many
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people
feel that
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some
pupils
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want
to
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study
by self. This essay will discuss both aspects and draw my personal opinion.

To
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begin
with, This
is understood
that
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students
spent their time in
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school
with friends; it could be in classroom, playground and cafeteria. As the play games in
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school
team
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so
the same way they
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want
to
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study
with friends in a
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group
. Everyone has
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different
perspectives and perception; they can share their knowledge and
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idea
about the lecture in the
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group
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so
in the way
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students
can
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study
for exams and
as well
for
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projects and
as well
as for
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group
assignments.
For instance
, If the
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student
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get
fail to attend the lecture or absent from the
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school
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so
later on he or she can do the remaining
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study
with
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school
friends.

On the other side of the arguments,
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some
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students
prefer to
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study
by oneself; they don't
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want
to
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study
within the
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group
.
Especially
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some
pupils waste their time during the
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study
in chatting and useless discussion with friends in
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group
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study
.
In addition
, When they
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study
alone, they can concentrate more
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
then
the
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group
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study
.
For example
, In library majority of the
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people
do their
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study
in a quiet environment
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because
they
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want
to bring full attention on the topic.

To sum up, It depends on the
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students
either they
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want
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study
in the
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groups
or they
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want
in isolation both have
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own
advantages and disadvantages. Research has proved that those
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students
are more intelligent who do their
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study
in
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groups
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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