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You are living in a rented apartment, but you have found some problems with the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: • say who you are• explain the problems• say what you want your landlord to do v.1

You are living in a rented apartment, but you have found some problems with the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: • say who you are• explain the problems• say what you want your landlord to do v. 1
In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on the phenomenon that some people argue that human should accept in favour of living with climate change. I myself completely disagree this point of view, because I strongly believe that human still have time to take action as well as tackle these issues. There are several measures that governments and individuals can prevent or at least mitigate it with supports by governments and individuals. To be more specific, the government should manipulate the strict rules in favour of the carbon dioxide emissions that leads to the global warming. In addition, the authorities not only create “ green taxes “ to restrain people own vehicles, but also invest the money in the renewable energy that results in the environmental friendly environment such as using solar panels, wind energy and so on. For individuals, the awareness of each person has an important role play in reducing the climate change. Besides, every citizen consumes the energy efficiency in the suitable ways by spending less on the cars, buses and air plane, which declines a huge of toxic gas emissions from transportation. Furthermore, the municipal residents can affect the actions of governments by voting for authorities who can manage well in the issues related to the extreme weather events, rather than who intentionally ignore it. The problem of climate change is irreversible if people try to live with them, it is clear that the consequences are more devastating. In addition, the levels of the sea are increased significantly as well as people do not have any means to deal with it, because human just a small species which do not power to make the iceberg frozen again. Furthermore, the dozens of large areas are disappearing that results in the increase of sea levels, millions of people will confront with flooding, particularly in some countries do not have the methods to safeguard low-lying areas. These people will lose their jobs and home, which boosts to migrate to other countries. However, the adverse effects of disaster weathers that leads to the outbreak of diseases and famine, as well as the life of humanity are in a danger. In conclusion, it is necessary to people should take action to protect their environment instead of adopting with it.
In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has
been placed
on the phenomenon that
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some
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people
argue that human should accept in
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favour
of living with climate
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change
. I myself completely disagree this point of view,
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because
I
strongly
believe that human
still
have time to take action as
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well
as tackle these issues.

There are several measures that
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governments
and individuals can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
or at least mitigate it with supports by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
and individuals. To be more specific, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should manipulate the strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of the carbon dioxide emissions that leads to the global warming.
In addition
, the authorities not
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only
create
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“
green taxes
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“
to restrain
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people
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own
vehicles,
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but
also
invest the money in the renewable energy that results in the environmental friendly environment such as using solar panels, wind energy and
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so
on. For individuals, the awareness of each person has an
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important
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
role play
in reducing the climate
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change
.
Besides
, every citizen consumes the energy efficiency in the suitable ways by spending less on the cars, buses and air
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plane
, which declines
The phrase 'a huge of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'a' and 'of'.
a huge of
toxic gas emissions from transportation.
Furthermore
, the municipal residents can affect the actions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
by voting for authorities who can manage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
in the issues related to the extreme weather
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
,
rather
than who
intentionally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
it.

The problem of climate
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change
is irreversible if
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people
try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with them, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the consequences are more devastating.
In addition
, the levels of the sea
are increased
significantly
as
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well
as
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people
do not have any means to deal with it,
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because
human
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just
a
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small
species which do not power to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the iceberg frozen again.
Furthermore
, the dozens of large areas are disappearing that results in the increase of sea levels, millions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will confront with flooding,
particularly
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
countries do not have the methods to safeguard low-lying areas. These
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will lose their jobs and home, which boosts to migrate to other countries.
However
, the adverse effects of disaster weathers that leads to the outbreak of diseases and famine, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
as the life of humanity are in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
.

In conclusion
, it is necessary to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should take action to protect their environment
instead
of adopting with it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay You are living in a rented apartment, but you have found some problems with the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: • say who you are• explain the problems• say what you want your landlord to do v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
384 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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