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You are supposed to move into a new apartment next week but you cannot do so because of some problems. Write a letter to the landlored. Explain your situation. describe your problems. tell him/her when you think you can move in v.1

You are supposed to move into a new apartment next week but you cannot do so because of some problems. Write a letter to the landlored. Explain your situation. describe your problems. tell him/her when you think you can move in v. 1
Numerous students are wandering abroad for advanced education in recent years. Whereas some people opine that the positive experience will outweigh the problems, others argue that there are several problems associated with it. In this essay, I will discuss why I believe that the advantages of a study abroad exceed the drawbacks. The main benefit of studying abroad is marvelous because students can meet and deal with different persons outside their country. They also have the opportunity to learn something that cannot be obtained conveniently in their home country. For Example, the king Abdullah program allows Saudis students to attend university in The United Kingdom. These students can develop the English language skills of the country they are visiting. Furthermore, they can learn in a system that is different from that of their home country. It is a truly invaluable experience for any person wishing to enrich their education. On the other hand, studying abroad can be a significant hazard if students cannot control, manage their selves, and accomplish some problems, especially in fundamental aspects. Moreover, they will be on trouble if they are not an independent person who hangs down from others. Due to this fact, some of the students quite frustrated when they have a problem regarding doing some assignments, clean their flat, and how to manage their time, especially when they are playing online games. To sum up the idea above, I reaffirmed that the advantages of continuing education abroad experience outweigh the deficiency that emerges from conducting education inside home countries. It can only be perceived if they can be an independent person, can control ourselves, and be mature to solve the problems regarding fundamental aspects.
Numerous
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students
are wandering
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abroad
for advanced education in recent years. Whereas
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some
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people
opine that the
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positive
experience will outweigh the
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problems
, others argue that there are several
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problems
associated with it. In this essay, I will discuss why I believe that the advantages of a study
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abroad
exceed the drawbacks.

The main benefit of studying
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abroad
is marvelous
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because
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students
can
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meet
and deal with
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different
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persons
outside their
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country
. They
also
have the opportunity to learn something that cannot
be obtained
conveniently
in their home
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country
.
For Example
, the king Abdullah program
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allows
Saudis
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students
to attend university in The United Kingdom. These
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students
can develop the English language
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skills
of the
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country
they are visiting.
Furthermore
, they can learn in a system
that is
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different
from that of their home
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country
. It is a
truly
invaluable experience for any
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person
wishing to enrich their education.

On the other hand
, studying
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abroad
can be a significant hazard if
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students
cannot control, manage their selves, and accomplish
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some
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problems
,
especially
in fundamental aspects.
Moreover
, they will be on trouble if they are not an independent
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person
who hangs down from others. Due to this fact,
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some of the
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students
quite frustrated when they have a
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problem
regarding doing
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some
assignments, clean their flat, and how to manage their time,
especially
when they are playing online games.

To sum up the
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idea
above, I reaffirmed that the advantages of continuing education
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abroad
experience outweigh the deficiency that emerges from conducting education inside home
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countries
. It can
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only
be perceived
if they can be an independent
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person
, can control ourselves, and be mature to solve the
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problems
regarding fundamental aspects.
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IELTS essay You are supposed to move into a new apartment next week but you cannot do so because of some problems. Write a letter to the landlored. Explain your situation. describe your problems. tell him/her when you think you can move in v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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