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Write a letter to the airline manager stating problems you had with the staff. •Write the flight details•Explain the problems•What you want manager to do v.1

Write a letter to the airline manager stating problems you had with the staff. •Write the flight details•Explain the problems•What you want manager to do v. 1
Although the need for procreation remains one of the major reasons for marriage, companionship is not only required mutually by spouses, but also their children. Adolescents nowadays, enjoy the company of their friends more than their immediate families and this is due to a number of reasons, including the generational compatibility issues that usually exist between parents and their offspring. This essay will explain why parents must not resort to the application of force in order to get their children to spend time at home. There are different things that appeal to different generations and these have changed over time. Millennials have their attractions and interests just as other age groups. Consequently, younger adults prefer using their times with people of like minds to spending it with their families. For example, a 25 years old may enjoy watching music videos but cannot do so when his father sees it as frivolous. In addition, social media has redirected the minds of young people. They are easily aware of fashion shows, trending events, concerts than any other generation was and this keeps them constantly on the move partying and having fun. As a palliative measure to this seemingly disturbing problem, parents should not welcome the idea of using violent methods to keep their children at home. Using force will only do more harm than good. They need to conduct a thorough assessment of their relationship style with their children. Although it is expected that the older people know better, parents need to examine how they communicate and relate to the choices their offspring make. Furthermore, parents need to learn to be tolerant and sometimes allow their child learn from the errors of their poor decisions. For instance, making an adolescent do what he does not like to do by force would create a vacuum in the relationship between the parent and the child. In conclusion, any family would most possibly give more than half of its resources just to see that all members love and want to be with each other. Therefore, parents should ensure they learn the language that appeals to their children more rather than consider the option of making them spend time at home against their will.
Although the
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need
for procreation remains one of the major reasons for marriage, companionship is not
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only
required
mutually
by spouses,
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but
also
their
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children
. Adolescents nowadays, enjoy the
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company
of their friends more than their immediate families and this is due to a number of reasons, including the generational compatibility issues that
usually
exist between
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parents
and their offspring. This essay will
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explain
why
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parents
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must
not resort to the application of force in order to
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get
their
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children
to spend
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time
at home.

There are
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different
things that appeal to
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different
generations and these have
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changed
over
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time
. Millennials have their attractions and interests
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just
as other age groups.
Consequently
, younger adults prefer using their
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times
with
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people
of like minds to spending it with their families.
For example
, a 25 years
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old
may enjoy watching music videos
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but
cannot do
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so
when his father
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sees
it as frivolous.
In addition
, social media has redirected the minds of young
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people
. They are
easily
aware of fashion
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shows
, trending
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events
, concerts than any other generation was and this
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keeps
them
constantly
on the
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move
partying and having fun.

As a palliative measure to this
seemingly
disturbing problem,
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parents
should not welcome the
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idea
of using violent methods to
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keep
their
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children
at home. Using force will
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only
do more harm than
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good
. They
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need
to conduct a thorough assessment of their relationship style with their
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children
. Although it is
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expected
that the older
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people
know better,
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parents
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need
to examine how they communicate and relate to the choices their offspring
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make
.
Furthermore
,
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parents
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need
to learn to be tolerant and
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sometimes
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allow
their child learn from the errors of their poor decisions.
For instance
, making an adolescent do what he does not like to do by force would create a vacuum in the relationship between the
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parent
and the child.

In conclusion
, any family would most
possibly
give more than half of its resources
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just
to
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see
that all members
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love
and want to be with each other.
Therefore
,
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parents
should ensure they learn the language that appeals to their
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children
more
rather
than consider the option of making them spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
at home against their will.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to the airline manager stating problems you had with the staff. •Write the flight details•Explain the problems•What you want manager to do v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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