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Many people still believe that riding a bicycle is the best way to get places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using bicycle these days? v.1

Many people still believe that riding a bicycle is the best way to get places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using bicycle these days? v. 1
With the increasing effects of the global warming, people are forced to think about the alternate energy resource to save the environment as well as themselves. And, nuclear energy is commonly considered as the most effective alternative of getting energy. Though, it has several major disadvantages, I partially consider the atom power, as a better choice of fulfilling public demands. To begin with, nuclear reactions, such as fusions and fissions, among small atom particles, can generate a great amount of energy, which is generally useful to produce the electricity for an entire city. It means, by using a small amount of raw materials, we can get a higher output with the flexibility. For example, the times of the US, has revealed that, twenty percent of electricity in the US, is being generated by the nuclear energy. Additionally, unlike non-renewable fossil fuels, nuclear power does not emit harmful gases, while generating the power. Eventually, this can be very beneficial to save the earth from the greenhouse effect and depletion of the ozone layer, which are hazardous for the environment. However, its disadvantages cannot be overlooked. A nuclear power plant may be responsible to take several lives, if there would be any accident occurs. Therefore, managing nuclear plant can be a risky to all of the living organisms. For instance, in 2001, due to tsunami in Japan, there was a leakage in such a nuclear plant, and it had taken so many lives. The effect of destruction was so high that even today, it is said that, no one can survive in that area. Moreover, with the increasing risk of global terror attacks, nuclear plants can be aimed by terrorists for mass destruction. To conclude, even though, nuclear energy has a tremendous power to fulfil all the needs of the increased population, people still need to be careful while using this renewable energy. Using it wisely, proactively and carefully, certainly gives a plethora of benefits to the mankind.
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people
are forced
to
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think
about the alternate
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energy
resource to save the environment
as well
as themselves. And, nuclear
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energy
is
commonly
considered as the most effective alternative of getting
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energy
. Though, it has several major disadvantages, I
partially
consider the atom
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power
, as a better choice of fulfilling public demands.

To
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begin
with, nuclear reactions, such as fusions and
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fissions
, among
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small
atom particles, can generate a great amount of
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energy
, which is
generally
useful to produce the electricity for an entire city. It means, by using a
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small
amount of raw materials, we can
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get
a higher output with the flexibility.
For example
, the times of the US, has revealed that, twenty percent of electricity in the US, is
being generated
by the nuclear
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energy
.
Additionally
, unlike non-renewable fossil fuels, nuclear
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power
does not emit harmful gases, while generating the
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power
.
Eventually
, this can be
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very
beneficial to save the earth from the greenhouse effect and depletion of the ozone layer, which are hazardous for the environment.

However
, its disadvantages cannot
be overlooked
. A nuclear
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power
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plant
may be responsible to take several
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lives
, if there would be any accident occurs.
Therefore
, managing nuclear
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plant
can be a risky to
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all of the
living organisms.
For instance
, in 2001, due to tsunami in Japan, there was a leakage in such a nuclear
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plant
, and it had taken
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so
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many
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lives
. The effect of destruction was
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so
high that even
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today
, it
is said
that, no one can survive in that area.
Moreover
, with the increasing
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risk
of global terror attacks, nuclear
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plants
can
be aimed
by terrorists for mass destruction.

To conclude
,
even though
, nuclear
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energy
has a tremendous
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power
to fulfil all the needs of the increased population,
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people
still
need to be careful while using this renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
. Using it
wisely
,
proactively
and
carefully
,
certainly
gives a plethora of benefits to the mankind.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people still believe that riding a bicycle is the best way to get places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using bicycle these days? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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