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Some people say that it is important to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that it is important to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 1
You should write at least 250 words. Shopping online for variety of things has become well known and has spread widely among people. This essay will discuss whether its benefits overbalance its disadvantages. Buying things on the internet can help you save your time and spend it elsewhere rather than driving to the shop and looking for what you need. This applies for clothes, books, air tickets, groceries, electronic devices and much more. All these stores are right there on your phone/computer one click away. Not only is online shopping quick but it can also be easier than purchasing from physical shops. For instance, if you need a certain piece of clothing, you can choose the category on the site and select specific characteristics like colour or design. Finding exactly what you’re looking for will not take as much time or effort as it would take normally. Despite the fact that online purchasing has outstanding advantages, its harms can be quite overwhelming. As shopping on the internet increases, credit cards theft and hacking grows as well. For example, personally my credit card has been hacked and used by a thief who was professional and specialized in stealing credit card information through hacking online shops. Although this case has become frighteningly common, people could not find a perfect way to prevent it from occurring. Moreover, some sites, which are not trusted, could post fake pictures for the products just to attract customers and people end up receiving very low quality objects and completely different from what they saw in the photos. To conclude, perks and drawbacks of buying from the internet can be nearly equal. However, some flaws can be avoided by being very careful and only dealing with well-known and trusted online websites
You should write at least 250 words. Shopping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
for variety of things has become well known and has spread
widely
among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. This essay will discuss whether its benefits overbalance its disadvantages.

Buying things on the internet can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you save your time and spend it elsewhere
rather
than driving to the shop and looking for what you need. This applies for clothes, books, air tickets, groceries, electronic devices and much more. All these stores are right there on your phone/computer one click away. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
shopping quick
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it can
also
be easier than purchasing from physical shops.
For instance
, if you need a certain piece of clothing, you can choose the category on the site and select specific characteristics like
Possible spelling mistake. 'colour' is British English.
colour
or design. Finding exactly what you’re looking for will not take as much time or effort as it would take
normally
.

Despite the fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
purchasing has outstanding advantages, its harms can be quite overwhelming. As shopping on the internet increases, credit cards theft and hacking grows
as well
.
For example
,
personally
my credit card has
been hacked
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by a thief who was professional and specialized in stealing credit card information through hacking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
shops. Although this case has become
frighteningly
common,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
could not find a perfect way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
it from occurring.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
sites, which are not trusted, could post fake pictures for the products
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
to attract customers and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up receiving
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
low quality objects and completely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
from what they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
in the photos.

To conclude
, perks and drawbacks of buying from the internet can be
nearly
equal.
However
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
flaws can
be avoided
by being
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
careful and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
dealing with well-known and trusted
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
websites
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that it is important to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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