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You missed a flight due to a problem at the airport. Write a letter to the airline. In this letter- describe what happened that caused you to miss the flight- explain how missing the flight affected you- make it clear what you would like the airline to do v.1

You missed a flight due to a problem at the airport. Write a letter to the airline. In this letter- describe what happened that caused you to miss the flight- explain how missing the flight affected you- make it clear what you would like the airline to do v. 1
While some people prefer living in a house, others believe that it is more beneficial to reside in apartments. However, I believe that residing in a house has more benefits than an apartment. One of the main reasons why there are more positives to staying in a house is that, people in houses have more privacy and their environment are less noisy. Usually, most apartments are constructed close to one another, this makes it almost impossible for people who enjoy living private lives have one. Furthermore, conversations happening in one apartment can be easily heard in another one. For example, the demarcation between most European apartments are commonly built with plywood. This material is not noise proof, hence, an apartment playing loud music will disturb a neighbour who just wants to sleep. Another reason why I feel living in a house is more beneficial is because, houses are big and have more room for expansion. The majority of apartments in cities are very small in size, while a small house could even be expanded. Because houses are big enough, it can accommodate large families. For instance, members of the extended family like grandparents, aunties and uncles can also live together in a house. Furthermore, private structures such as, a playing ground and gardens can be built around the house. In conclusion, although some people feel that apartments have more advantages than houses, I am of the opinion that living in houses is better. This is mainly because houses are more private and can accommodate big families.
While
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some
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people
prefer
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living
in a
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house
, others believe that it is more beneficial to reside in
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apartments
.
However
, I believe that residing in a
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house
has more benefits than an apartment.

One of the main reasons why there are more positives to staying in a
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house
is that,
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people
in
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houses
have more privacy and their environment are less noisy.
Usually
, most
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apartments
are constructed
close to one another, this
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makes
it almost impossible for
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people
who enjoy
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living
private
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lives
have one.
Furthermore
, conversations happening in one
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apartment
can be
easily
heard in another one.
For example
, the demarcation between most European
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apartments
are
commonly
built with plywood. This material is not noise proof,
hence
, an
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apartment
playing loud music will disturb a
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neighbour
who
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just
wants to sleep.

Another reason why I feel
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living
in a
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house
is more beneficial is
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because
,
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houses
are
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big
and have more room for expansion. The majority of
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apartments
in cities are
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very
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small in size
, while a
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small
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house
could even
be expanded
.
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Because
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houses
are
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big
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enough
, it can accommodate large families.
For instance
, members of the extended family like grandparents, aunties and uncles can
also
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live
together in a
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house
.
Furthermore
, private structures such as, a playing ground and gardens can
be built
around the
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house
.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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people
feel that
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apartments
have more advantages than
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houses
, I am of the opinion that
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living
in
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houses
is better. This is
mainly
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because
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houses
are more private and can accommodate
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big
families.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You missed a flight due to a problem at the airport. Write a letter to the airline. In this letter- describe what happened that caused you to miss the flight- explain how missing the flight affected you- make it clear what you would like the airline to do v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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