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Student Saini universities open have it was two places to live they may choose to live a University dominators they may choose to live in apartment in the community compare the advantages of living in universities housing with the advent of living in an a v.1

Student Saini universities open have it was two places to live they may choose to live a University dominators they may choose to live in apartment in the community compare the advantages of living in universities housing with the advent of living in an a v. 1
In the modern era, where everyone wants to lead a luxurious life, avail the opportunities to migrate into other countries and ready to work in those positions which domestic workers unwilling to do. From my perspective, I partially agree with this statement that it causes problems in local society. To begin with, nowadays, due to the increasing rate of unemployment, folks migrate to other countries in search of a job for a better life and are open to do any kind of work they get for their survival in that area, but domestic people who belongs to that region are not ready to do the low level kind of works like cleaning, loading and so on and thus, creates a problem for the local folks to accept them as a member of their society and feeling of racial discrimination arises, which is not good for the prosperity of that particular nation. For instance, according to the recent survey it has been observed that the cases of racial discrimination are at the highest peak in the USA and other developed countries. On the other hand, it is logical that every person wants its business to be well established and for that they need workers, but if domestic workers of that area are ready for the work, then they should not bring the workers from other countries as it creates unemployment among local people and promotes racism against them which is not good for nation social fabric. To illustrate, in the recent survey in California, it has been discovered that there has been an increase in the number of racism cases against folks from other nations To conclude, although, it cannot be denied that foreign companies employ people from other countries to increase their profit, but at the same time they have to create employment for local folks as well.
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in those positions which domestic
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workers
unwilling to do. From my perspective, I
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with, nowadays, due to the increasing rate of unemployment, folks migrate to
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other
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countries
in search of a job for a better life and are open to do any kind of
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work
they
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for their survival in that area,
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to that region are not ready to do the low level kind of works like cleaning, loading and
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on and
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folks to accept them as a member of their society and feeling of racial discrimination arises, which is not
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good
for the prosperity of that particular nation.
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been observed
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other
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developed countries
.

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hand, it is logical that every person wants its business to be well established and for that they need
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,
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if domestic
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of that area are ready for the
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work
, then they should not bring the
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from
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countries
as it creates unemployment among
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local
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people
and promotes racism against them which is not
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good
for nation social fabric. To illustrate, in the recent survey in California, it has
been discovered
that there has been an increase in the number of racism cases against folks from
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other
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nations


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, although, it cannot
be denied
that foreign
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companies
employ
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from
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to increase their profit,
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at the same time they
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create employment for
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folks
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IELTS essay Student Saini universities open have it was two places to live they may choose to live a University dominators they may choose to live in apartment in the community compare the advantages of living in universities housing with the advent of living in an a v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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