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women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths an weaknesses, is it right to exclude male or female from certain professions because of their gender? v.2

Males and females are often viewed as having differing skill sets. It is agreed that it is correct to exclude people from certain jobs on the basis of their gender, but only in very limited circumstances. This essay will first discuss how physical attributes prevent women from excelling in particular roles; secondly discuss how society at large rejects men from undertaking certain careers, followed by a reasoned conclusion. For many years the general consensus in the armed forces is that women should not be allowed to participate in combat missions. This is because most women lack the brute strength required for this particular occupation and it is, therefore, right to prevent them from joining the ranks. For example, the American Army recently allowed some women to fight on the front line and the Department of Defence deemed the experiment a failure, due to lack of fighting effectiveness. Despite this, many women have fought in many wars, famously on the Eastern Front for Russia and the Viet Cong in Vietnam, so maybe it is men’s’ attitudes that prevent them performing rather than their stature. Society has yet to accept men in many traditionally female positions, such as nanny or beautician. Businesses feel that it is fine to not hire men for these posts because most of their customers would not be willing to have a man perform that service. I personally know of one example when a friend failed at the interview stage when applying to become a kindergarten teacher because he was the wrong sex. To summarise, in limited circumstances it is just to prohibit people from certain occupations, but only if they cannot physically perform or if the general consensus is that it is a single sex post
Males and females are
often
viewed as having differing
skill
sets. It is
agreed
that it is correct to exclude
people
from certain jobs on the basis of their gender,
but
only
in
very
limited circumstances. This essay will
first
discuss how physical attributes
prevent
women
from excelling
in particular
roles;
secondly
discuss how society at large rejects
men
from undertaking certain careers, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

For
many
years the
general consensus
in the armed forces is that
women
should not be
allowed
to participate in combat missions. This is
because
most
women
lack the brute strength required for this particular occupation and it is,
therefore
, right to
prevent
them from joining the ranks.
For example
, the American Army recently
allowed
some
women
to fight on the front line and the Department of
Defence
deemed the experiment a failure, due to lack of fighting effectiveness. Despite this,
many
women
have fought in
many
wars,
famously
on the Eastern Front for Russia and the
Viet
Cong in Vietnam,
so
maybe it is
men’s’
attitudes that
prevent
them performing
rather
than their stature.

Society has
yet
to accept
men
in
many
traditionally
female positions, such as nanny or beautician. Businesses feel that it is fine to not hire
men
for these posts
because
most of their customers would not be willing to have a
man
perform that service. I
personally
know of one example when a friend failed at the interview stage when applying to become a kindergarten teacher
because
he was the
wrong
sex.

To
summarise
, in limited circumstances it is
just
to prohibit
people
from certain occupations,
but
only
if they cannot
physically
perform or if the
general consensus
is that it is a single sex post
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IELTS essay Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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