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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and violent crimes increases. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and violent crimes increases. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v. 2
Over the past few decades, there has been controversy over the issue of capital punishment, where people may think that it is crucial to execute this for the purpose of deterring, but others do not. In my opinion, I advocate that the death penalty is essential to maintaining the rules of society. To start with, people may think that the death penalty is necessary to reduce the violence of the crimes. A good instance of this is that people attacked by strangers accidently in a couple of years ago in Taiwan and in the United States, such as shooting or stabbing. In order to help people stem public panic and to deter the criminals, people deem that it is the most effective way to address the issue by introducing the death penalty. As my personal opinion, I agree with this idea of capital punishment because it could reduce crime rates and maintain the rules of society. However, although some people are opposed to using capital punishment with decreasing offences repeatedly, the reason for this is that the death penalty could not eliminate the root causes of problems and would deliver the wrong message for citizens with violent behaviour. In other words, it seems like a form of revenge by enforcing the death penalty and there is no any reason to allow people to deprive the rights of human beings. On the other hand, I still believe that preserving the death penalty is reminding people with the strict law and also think that abolishing it would not solve the criminal behaviour. In conclusion, capital punishment is a debatable issue and have strong views on both sides. Taking prompt actions can be declined the violent crimes.
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that it is crucial to execute this for the purpose of deterring,
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others do not. In my opinion, I advocate that the death
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penalty
is essential to maintaining the
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rules
of society.

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people
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that the death
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is necessary to
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reduce
the violence of the crimes. A
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good
instance of this is that
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people
attacked by strangers
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accidently
in a couple of years ago in Taiwan and in the United States, such as shooting or stabbing. In order to
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help
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people
stem public panic and to deter the criminals,
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people
deem that it is the most effective way to address the issue by introducing the death
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penalty
. As my personal opinion, I
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agree
with this
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of
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because
it could
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reduce
crime rates and maintain the
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rules
of society.

However
, although
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some
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people
are opposed
to using
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capital
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punishment
with decreasing
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offences
repeatedly
,
the reason for this is
that the death
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penalty
could not eliminate the root causes of problems and would deliver the
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wrong
message for citizens with violent
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behaviour
.
In other words
, it seems like a form of revenge by enforcing the death
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penalty
and there is
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no
any reason to
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allow
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people
to deprive the rights of human beings.
On the other hand
, I
still
believe that preserving the death
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penalty
is reminding
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people
with the strict law and
also
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think
that abolishing it would not solve the criminal
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behaviour
.

In conclusion
,
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capital
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punishment
is a debatable issue and have strong views on both sides. Taking prompt actions can
be declined
the violent crimes.
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IELTS essay Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and violent crimes increases. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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