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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.3

Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. with this opinion? v. 3
Abolishing the death penalty, our lives are unsafe and crime rates grow up so according to some capital punishment is the best way to keep violence rate in society under control. In my opinion, I agree that execution is beneficial to control violence in the community as it will greatly benefit both individuals and society. A good reason to keep the legislation of the death penalty is that bad people or criminals will always get to know that there will be punishment in the end for their bad actions. This will result in reducing the crime rates and making the country a safe destination for anyone. Moreover, fewer crime rates will lead to decreasing a greater source of money that will be consumed by the forces in searching and arresting the criminals and lowering the number of individuals in the forces. In other words, reducing the fund that goes to the forces will bring greater rewards to other sectors. Finally, applying capital punishment will benefit the society in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up the country to a great source of income that came from the tourism and foreign investment. In other words, less crime rate in the country will encourage people from a different country across the world to invest their money in this country. Moreover, this money can be used to fund different sectors in society, such as increasing the medical healthcare fund. In conclusion, Capital punishment is a must for any society that wants to reduce the crime rates and to make its place much safer. Also, more economic advantages will be recouped in the long term by turning our society into a safe place.
Abolishing the death penalty, our
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are unsafe and
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grow up
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so
according to
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capital
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punishment
is the best way to
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keep
violence
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rate
in
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society
under control. In my opinion, I
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agree
that execution is beneficial to control violence in the community as it will
greatly
benefit both individuals and society.

A
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good
reason to
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keep
the legislation of the death penalty is that
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bad
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people
or criminals will always
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get
to know that there will be
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punishment
in the
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end
for their
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bad
actions. This will result in reducing the
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crime
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rates
and making the
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country
a safe destination for anyone.
Moreover
, fewer
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crime
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rates
will lead to decreasing a greater source of money that will
be consumed
by the forces in searching and arresting the criminals and lowering the number of individuals in the forces.
In other words
, reducing the fund that goes to the forces will bring greater rewards to other sectors.

Finally
, applying capital
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punishment
will benefit the
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society
in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up the
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country
to a great source of income that came from the tourism and foreign investment.
In other words
, less
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crime
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rate
in the
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country
will encourage
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people
from a
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different
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country
across the world to invest their money in this
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country
.
Moreover
, this money can be
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used
to fund
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different
sectors in
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society
, such as increasing the medical healthcare fund.

In conclusion
, Capital
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punishment
is a
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must
for any
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society
that wants to
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reduce
the
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crime
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rates
and to
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make
its place much safer.
Also
, more economic advantages will
be recouped
in the long term by turning our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
into a safe place.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. with this opinion? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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