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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.8

Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v. 8
There are many punishments being set by government to be imposed on the delinquency. The heaviest punishment in Malaysia is the capital punishment, which is also known as death penalty. Many people have the presumption that capital punishment will provide more security to our lives and reduce the criminal cases. They assume that this punishment can control violence in our society. I agree to this assumption to a certain extent. In this essay, I will share my opinions regarding this assumption and discuss why others think it is not essential to control crime rate in the society. First and foremost, I agree capital punishment can be used as a way to control violence in the society because of its intimidating effects. I have to confess that everyone does not want to die. We know that life is precious and therefore, we should treasure our life. With the increasing in criminal cases such as drug trafficking and murder, capital punishment is the punishment for delinquent. There have been many cases which are drug trafficking and murder occurred in Malaysia. In order to avoid punishment, those who have convicted the crime ran to overseas such as Australia as they know life imprisonment will be imposed instead of capital punishment if they are arrested. I believe death penalty is important to be imposed to act as a warning to the society so that they would not commit the crime. One the one hand, it is reasonable to have capital punishment in a country due to its intimidating effect. On the other hand, people argue that it is not humane to sentence the delinquent to death. They are against the death penalty because if society is to sentence the delinquent to death, the society is acted like a murderer. There is no difference between the society and murderer if capital punishment is being used by a country. They suggest to replace the capital punishment with life imprisonment. This is no doubt a merciful way from the religious’ point of view in which the delinquent is to be imprisoned for his whole life instead of being sent to death. They believe this is a better way because the delinquent can have the time to remorse of the crime he has convicted. In such a way, when the society is being mercy to delinquent, they will be less violent. To sum up, I agree that death penalty can reduce criminal cases to the minimum but not to zero. This is undoubtedly a cruel punishment to those who have convicted a crime, though. It is the reason why there are many countries which are on the way to abolish capital punishment and replace it with life imprisonment. Some people think that the delinquent has his or her own human right as well. The country should not take away a precious life just because of the crime he has convicted.
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on the delinquency. The heaviest
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punishment
in Malaysia is the
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capital
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punishment
, which is
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penalty
.
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people
have the presumption that
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capital
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punishment
will provide more security to our
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lives
and
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reduce
the criminal cases. They assume that this
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punishment
can control violence in our
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society
. I
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agree
to this assumption to a certain extent. In this essay, I will share my opinions regarding this assumption and discuss why others
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think
it is not essential to control
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crime
rate in the society.

First
and foremost, I
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agree
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capital
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punishment
can be
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used
as a way to control violence in the
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society
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because
of its intimidating effects. I
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have to
confess that everyone does not want to
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die
. We know that
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life
is precious and
therefore
, we should treasure our
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life
. With the increasing in criminal cases such as drug trafficking and murder,
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capital
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punishment
is the
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punishment
for
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delinquent
. There have been
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many
cases which are drug trafficking and murder occurred in Malaysia. In order to avoid
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punishment
, those who have
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convicted
the
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crime
ran to overseas such as Australia as they know
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life
imprisonment will
be imposed
instead
of
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capital
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punishment
if they
are arrested
. I believe death
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penalty
is
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important
to
be imposed
to act as a warning to the
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society
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so
that they would not commit the crime.

Did you mean "on"?
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the one hand, it is reasonable to have
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capital
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punishment
in a
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country
due to its intimidating effect.
On the other hand
,
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people
argue that it is not humane to sentence the
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delinquent
to death. They are against the death
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penalty
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because
if
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society
is to sentence the
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delinquent
to death, the
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society
is acted
like a murderer. There is no difference between the
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society
and murderer if
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capital
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punishment
is being
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. They
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with
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life
imprisonment. This is no doubt a merciful way from the religious’ point of view in which the
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delinquent
is to
be imprisoned
for his whole
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life
instead
of being
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sent
to death. They believe this is a better way
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because
the
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delinquent
can have the time to remorse of the
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crime
he has
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convicted
. In such a way, when the
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society
is being mercy to
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delinquent
, they will be less violent.

To sum up, I
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that death
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can
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reduce
criminal cases to the minimum
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but
not to zero. This is
undoubtedly
a cruel
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punishment
to those who have
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convicted
a
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crime
, though. It is the reason why there are
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countries
which are on the way to abolish
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capital
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punishment
and replace it with
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life
imprisonment.
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has
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human right
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should not take away a precious
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life
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of the
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he has
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convicted
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
482 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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